Dark Poetry #3 |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
invisible hallways organ of maze ephemeral thought edible phrase trinkets on a shelf pick up a dream turn it 'round gently look for a gleam (was this feeling real or merely obscene?) twisting convolution tethered to the spine chained by the flesh it treated unkind one of you should leave I don't care which the noise is corrosive I'm digging a ditch I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
guess who couldn't sleep? This one really bothered me, bri. Wasn't going to let it go without a and a . Now pardon me for this brief editorial: Since there has been some controversy over the value of depth of people's replies? YES PEOPLE, I read it, prolly memorized it. Sigh. It's hard enough to write poetry and have it critiqued without the replies being critiqued too, doncha think? So...if this isn't good enough for some of you? You can all kiss me arse g'nite. Dream Sweet. Nite, Bri... |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
"DIG THROUGH THE DITCHES AND BURN THROUGH THE WITCHES AND SLAM IN THE BACK OF MY DRAGULA!!!!!" sorry this poem reminded me of rob zombie... yea man.. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
And who says you don't have that rhyme of all time??? you got it good here mybri!!! have I been gone so long that me sis is offering up her behind as critique?? YEESH...gotta get online more often...grins. enjoyed your mind altering words here sweets. and? I don't have a critical message for you. sorry. just one of these pouncing thangs... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Sheesh! First, I miss out on nude Karioke in one my OWN posts, Then, Karenity makes moonglow over here. I miss EVERYTHING! Including the point, sometimes. But, got enough of this one. I think. ~Ed |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
An interesting poem. I will have to think a bit more about this one. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Brian, I too am (annoyed) at people of late. Seems to me, the ones who whine are the ones who lack. You're one of my very favorites, bri. .m. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You might like this. /pip/Forum72/HTML/001983.html Mikey |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I'm so behind in everything k -- of course not! you could have no arms or legs and still be here posting poems to make the night vibrate thank you, babe ES -- I can hear it now....thanks dude Tanya -- *pounce*pounce*pounce*pounce* the wonderful thing about Tanya's is your the only one! thank you, vulnerable one *ducking* Ed -- I don't know the point either, man I just write what the PW 5.0 says fractal -- thank you, Mr. Bond Mike -- I weren't annoyed at anyone ceptin me you do me justice I haven't earned, man and? the opinions you express? on that topic? and from your poem? I go back to what I've said before grow some wrinkles already, damn ya yer Yoda thanks everybody |
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