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0 posted 2004-03-11 08:45 PM



My granddaughter did it again.  "Grandma can do anything AND she writes poetry!"

Well, that got me engaged in a poetry "lesson" times four.  That's right.  Four classes, this coming Monday.

ACK!

I need assonance, alliteration, meter, limericks, anything you can throw at me.  I will give, of COURSE, proper credit to you as the poet, and help these kids, because God knows, I'm only half-way decent in free verse, and that's not giving the kids the WORLD they need.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE help?  My granddaughter is counting on YOU to make ALL OF US look GREAT!  Let's bring these sixth graders into the world of art [as the budgets keep cutting these things back] and I am taking some vacation hours to help out.  Help me, help them?  No money, no new thoughts required.  Just tag your best HERE....please????  And I'll get along with their lives, by sharing the ones WHO ARE BEST with what they do best.

God bless you all, and a huge HUGS and THANKS beforehand.

© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-03-11 09:12 PM


Karilea~
You are welcome to pick something of mine to use ... I am not good at picking 'best' ... so I will throw out one 'favorite' ...~
YOU make the decision~
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Am hoping they would allow ~Sir in the classroom ...

*Huglets*:huglets:
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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2 posted 2004-03-11 10:18 PM


Well sunshine I'm afraid my best might be unsuitable for 6th graders but here's a couple older ones that might work for you. Feel free to use any of my poems you deem suitable to your purpose...
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3 posted 2004-03-12 01:51 AM


you are welcome to any of my stuff
though i dont know if any of it is worth being a teaching tool! LOL
but, whatever you want is yours... and i commend you for teaching those kids about poetry....seems alot of young ones dont care about it

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4 posted 2004-03-12 03:07 PM


Got room for a limerick?
And this one's on you!

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5 posted 2004-03-12 03:28 PM


Ah Kraw, don't you know I love it!  Thank you so much!

Marge, I'll be glad to use that poem.  

Muted, a huge thanks!

OKC, darlin' man...you'd be surprised what these kids can handle!  I'll check it out.  YOU FOLKS ARE TERRIFIC!

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6 posted 2004-03-12 08:07 PM


If you plan to put in meter and foot, here is a lame example.  Of course, Kit McCallum's "Playing with my feet" is matchless on the subject.
Iambic moronic

Iambic is a fretful pattern true;
But ne’er say ne’er is what we need to do.
For if we write with all our heart and soul,
We trust that we shall seek and find our goal

So thank you for your lifting words to us
Who toil and strain with words that make us cuss.
The reasons why we strain to reach our peak
Is only that we need the joy we seek

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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7 posted 2004-03-12 08:53 PM


Sunshine,
I'm going to have to give this one some thought. I'll be happy to participate, and look forward to the challenge of trying to contrive something from sixth graders eyes.
Doc

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8 posted 2004-03-13 12:15 PM


I've been getting "guidelines" from my granddaughter. They don't want to be "lectured" to.  They want it to be "fun".  They are NOT..."young".  [So speaks the 25 year old 6th grader]...

I've taken some works from comtemporary artists...some from our own published PiP Anthologies....trying to get the younger ones to understand that poetry...is something they will feel, or will not feel...

and if they do?  It's OK to share.  That will be the message.  It's OK to show feelings, not to worry about what someone thinks...get them to let loose with their thoughts earlier in life.

That will be the message.

Tell me if y'all think "NOT"...I listen...always.

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9 posted 2004-03-13 09:17 AM


You're welcome to anything of mine, also. I'm afraid the only thing I ever write with any sort of from is Haiku, though.
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10 posted 2004-03-13 09:49 AM


Here's some...
Onomatopoeia, alliteration, iambic tetrameter

Cellar Dwellers

How can I get my basement clean?
Those cellar dwellers are so mean!
Undoing all that I have done,
They think - perhaps I'm having fun?

Scrub as I might they do not care.
They hide in corners everywhere;
These little fellers pink in hue
Conspirators, my work undo.

I hear them twitter at my back,
Cacophonous counter attack.
Each corner now devoid of stuff,
Upon the walls I see them stuck!!

These puny paired prolific pests
Have brand new Cellar Dweller nests.
Their young imprint me as their mom
And cling to me. Where'd they come from?

I scoop them up, neat as you please,
But - WHOOSH - they're off then with a breeze.
Sweep them again to cast them out,
'All Cellar Dwellers, SCAT", I shout!!

I'll never win this war, I fear.
These Cellar Dwellers will live here
Long after this is not my home -
Pink peanut packing styrofoam...



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11 posted 2004-03-13 09:58 AM



  Peanut packing perfect!  Consider it snagged!

Thanks, Edder.  They LOVE Haikus!

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12 posted 2004-03-14 07:59 PM


Mom -

Use that one of mine you said you wanted, or anything else of mine, for that matter (although I'm thinking you probably won't need it, with all of this response).  Best of luck.

Brian

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13 posted 2004-03-14 08:10 PM


Thanks, son.  I will!
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14 posted 2004-03-15 07:11 PM


Thank you Thank you Thank you.

I spoke to about 100 children today from one class to another.  Although I had an "outline", each "talk" was a little different, one from the other.  Different kids, different questions, different ways to look at things.

I will be thanking those poets individually who allowed me to use their words.  I so appreciate how much you have all entrusted your words to me.  

I think the one thing I was able to get across to most of them.  If they are thinking of writing, and if they are feeling it NOW...then WRITE IT NOW....

You will all be quite amused, I hope, when I tell you that one of the boys asked my age.  His teacher was aghast, and told him "you don't ask that question of a lady!"  I smiled...and laughed inside...so after I had my "formal" introduction, I asked the kids..."who wants to know my age?"  Several hands shot up...

and after that, it became the loudest laugh you ever heard....

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15 posted 2004-03-15 08:46 PM


I regret that I did not see this until tonight.

Though most of what I have posted here is too dark for children, you would have been welcome to use anything you thought appropriate.


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16 posted 2004-03-15 11:17 PM


Karilea

It's wonderful that you did this...I would have loved to have been there.  

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17 posted 2004-03-22 09:37 PM


quote:
I think the one thing I was able to get across to most of them.  If they are thinking of writing, and if they are feeling it NOW...then WRITE IT NOW....


I have some major disputes with that sentiment, hehe... but I won't share unless prompted.

I'm glad to hear that it went well for you though, Sunshine.  I'd also like you to know that I'd never presume to ask your age... I'm far too much of a gentleman.  

Brian

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18 posted 2004-03-29 04:20 PM



GIVE ME A KISS

Give me a kiss and I'll tell you a tale
Of butterfly wings that flutter and sail
That tumble and twist, but when they are still
They make your heart throb at the wonder and thrill

So dainty and light, they are swept by the wind
You could hardly imagine the strength from within
How in the world do they manage to go
On a round trip vacation to old Mexico?

We think we invented all manner of flight
But we're awed and appalled at the butterfly's might

Give me a hug and I'll tell you a tale
About the impossible feats of a whale
He spews out a fountain of mystical mist
And speaks with a whale-like linguistical twist

Like a rocket he suddenly propels from the sea
Laborious and glorious, victoriously free
He dapperly dives to the deep darkest depth
Maintaining his grace and sustaining his breath

We think that we've conquered the oceans we sail
Still confused and bemused by the cues of a whale

Sit on my lap and we'll talk of a bird
That sings the most beautiful song ever heard
From a tropical palm tree the Sabia sings
His music is honored by poets and kings

His melodies tease and pleasantly please
As they float over rivers and rain forest trees
They enrich and bewitch other birds all around
Who are lured to his tree by the musical sound

We think we produce the best music by far
But the Sabia laughs at our poor repertoire

Give me a kiss and a hug and we'll look
At butterfly wings in your butterfly book
Come here to Grandma and listen to tales
We'll ponder the wonder of wonderful whales
We'll try to imagine the Sabia's song
That has captured and raptured his world all along

Come give me a kiss, it's time now for bed
Let the butterflies tumble
and twirl in your head

Grab on to a whale....

Swim into the deep....

Let the sabia's

music...

put you

to

sleep

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Smiling at you, Lady Santos!  I'm keeping this for the NEXT time, because I've been told there WILL be a next time!   Looking back on that day, I would do two things differently.  

(1)  I wouldn't plan to come back to work, dress more casually, and have everyone sit in a circle on the floor.  Yes, they're 6th graders, but the floor would have been more fun!

(2)  I would have taken more business cards.  We have two of the kids who showed a lot of interest afterwards, coming to our next meeting in May.

It WAS so much fun!  I hope that more of you talk to the schools and see if they would like you to come and "share with their kids".  The smiles alone are more than reward enough, believe me.

It was SUCH a great time!

[Wish I had thought to bring my camera.  Reminder #3...]

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quote:
April 6, 2004

Dear Karilea,

Enclosed please find copies of a few poems by my sixth graders.  WE finally finished our poetry unit, and I was very pleased with their final poems.  I thought you might be interested to see the variety of poetic elements they used.

Again, thank you for your contribution to our unit.  I appreciate all the time and effort that went into your visit.  I am grateful for people in public life who value what we do.

If I teach poetry again next year, you might expect a call from me.  It's great for the students to see that "real people" write and get published.

Very sincerely,

/s/ Michelle Keeler




You should see some of these poems.  WOW....

I'm raising my hand for next year.

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21 posted 2004-04-08 07:42 PM


Karilea~
I KNOW just how much fun and pleasure you got out of this outing~

I do these poetry thingies with my son's fifth grade and my daughter's twelfth grade classes .... so rewarding~

Thanks for sharing~

And was wondering if Sir~ was allowed in school ?
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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22 posted 2004-04-08 08:29 PM



Wouldn't it be nice if it were, Marge?

Yes, this is the second time I got to participate with my granddaughter.  The first time, in 3rd grade, for two days; this time, over 100 students.  You should see some of the poems that were sent to me.  I am so amazed at the minds of the young students.  I have written to the teacher, and have asked her to share my letter with her student.

And I left one last poem with them.  It's April.  I left Lyra's poem.

"Slender Threads, Faith, and Time"

I believe that on any level, even without them knowing the why for it, they will understand some part of it, in some way.

And my hand is still "up" for next year.

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