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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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My granddaughter did it again. "Grandma can do anything AND she writes poetry!" Well, that got me engaged in a poetry "lesson" times four. That's right. Four classes, this coming Monday. ACK! I need assonance, alliteration, meter, limericks, anything you can throw at me. I will give, of COURSE, proper credit to you as the poet, and help these kids, because God knows, I'm only half-way decent in free verse, and that's not giving the kids the WORLD they need. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE help? My granddaughter is counting on YOU to make ALL OF US look GREAT! Let's bring these sixth graders into the world of art [as the budgets keep cutting these things back] and I am taking some vacation hours to help out. Help me, help them? No money, no new thoughts required. Just tag your best HERE....please???? And I'll get along with their lives, by sharing the ones WHO ARE BEST with what they do best. God bless you all, and a huge HUGS and THANKS beforehand. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ You are welcome to pick something of mine to use ... I am not good at picking 'best' ... so I will throw out one 'favorite' ...~ YOU make the decision~ /pip/Forum37/HTML/002626.html Am hoping they would allow ~Sir in the classroom ...  *Huglets*:huglets: ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Well sunshine I'm afraid my best might be unsuitable for 6th graders  but here's a couple older ones that might work for you. Feel free to use any of my poems you deem suitable to your purpose.../pip/Forum2/HTML/000289.html /pip/Forum31/HTML/000201.html |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you are welcome to any of my stuff  though i dont know if any of it is worth being a teaching tool! LOL but, whatever you want is yours... and i commend you for teaching those kids about poetry....seems alot of young ones dont care about it |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Got room for a limerick? And this one's on you! /pip/Forum22/HTML/000818.html |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Kraw, don't you know I love it! Thank you so much! Marge, I'll be glad to use that poem. Muted, a huge thanks! OKC, darlin' man...you'd be surprised what these kids can handle! I'll check it out. YOU FOLKS ARE TERRIFIC! |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
If you plan to put in meter and foot, here is a lame example. Of course, Kit McCallum's "Playing with my feet" is matchless on the subject. Iambic moronic Iambic is a fretful pattern true; But ne’er say ne’er is what we need to do. For if we write with all our heart and soul, We trust that we shall seek and find our goal So thank you for your lifting words to us Who toil and strain with words that make us cuss. The reasons why we strain to reach our peak Is only that we need the joy we seek Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sunshine, I'm going to have to give this one some thought. I'll be happy to participate, and look forward to the challenge of trying to contrive something from sixth graders eyes. Doc |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've been getting "guidelines" from my granddaughter. They don't want to be "lectured" to. They want it to be "fun". They are NOT..."young". [So speaks the 25 year old 6th grader]... I've taken some works from comtemporary artists...some from our own published PiP Anthologies....trying to get the younger ones to understand that poetry...is something they will feel, or will not feel... and if they do? It's OK to share. That will be the message. It's OK to show feelings, not to worry about what someone thinks...get them to let loose with their thoughts earlier in life. That will be the message. Tell me if y'all think "NOT"...I listen...always. |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
You're welcome to anything of mine, also. I'm afraid the only thing I ever write with any sort of from is Haiku, though. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Here's some... Onomatopoeia, alliteration, iambic tetrameter Cellar Dwellers How can I get my basement clean? Those cellar dwellers are so mean! Undoing all that I have done, They think - perhaps I'm having fun? Scrub as I might they do not care. They hide in corners everywhere; These little fellers pink in hue Conspirators, my work undo. I hear them twitter at my back, Cacophonous counter attack. Each corner now devoid of stuff, Upon the walls I see them stuck!! These puny paired prolific pests Have brand new Cellar Dweller nests. Their young imprint me as their mom And cling to me. Where'd they come from? I scoop them up, neat as you please, But - WHOOSH - they're off then with a breeze. Sweep them again to cast them out, 'All Cellar Dwellers, SCAT", I shout!! I'll never win this war, I fear. These Cellar Dwellers will live here Long after this is not my home - Pink peanut packing styrofoam...  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 Peanut packing perfect! Consider it snagged!Thanks, Edder. They LOVE Haikus! |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Mom - Use that one of mine you said you wanted, or anything else of mine, for that matter (although I'm thinking you probably won't need it, with all of this response). Best of luck. Brian |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thanks, son. I will! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Thank you Thank you. I spoke to about 100 children today from one class to another. Although I had an "outline", each "talk" was a little different, one from the other. Different kids, different questions, different ways to look at things. I will be thanking those poets individually who allowed me to use their words. I so appreciate how much you have all entrusted your words to me. I think the one thing I was able to get across to most of them. If they are thinking of writing, and if they are feeling it NOW...then WRITE IT NOW.... You will all be quite amused, I hope, when I tell you that one of the boys asked my age. His teacher was aghast, and told him "you don't ask that question of a lady!" I smiled...and laughed inside...so after I had my "formal" introduction, I asked the kids..."who wants to know my age?" Several hands shot up... and after that, it became the loudest laugh you ever heard.... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I regret that I did not see this until tonight. Though most of what I have posted here is too dark for children, you would have been welcome to use anything you thought appropriate. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea It's wonderful that you did this...I would have loved to have been there. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
quote: I have some major disputes with that sentiment, hehe... but I won't share unless prompted. I'm glad to hear that it went well for you though, Sunshine. I'd also like you to know that I'd never presume to ask your age... I'm far too much of a gentleman.  Brian |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
GIVE ME A KISS Give me a kiss and I'll tell you a tale Of butterfly wings that flutter and sail That tumble and twist, but when they are still They make your heart throb at the wonder and thrill So dainty and light, they are swept by the wind You could hardly imagine the strength from within How in the world do they manage to go On a round trip vacation to old Mexico? We think we invented all manner of flight But we're awed and appalled at the butterfly's might Give me a hug and I'll tell you a tale About the impossible feats of a whale He spews out a fountain of mystical mist And speaks with a whale-like linguistical twist Like a rocket he suddenly propels from the sea Laborious and glorious, victoriously free He dapperly dives to the deep darkest depth Maintaining his grace and sustaining his breath We think that we've conquered the oceans we sail Still confused and bemused by the cues of a whale Sit on my lap and we'll talk of a bird That sings the most beautiful song ever heard From a tropical palm tree the Sabia sings His music is honored by poets and kings His melodies tease and pleasantly please As they float over rivers and rain forest trees They enrich and bewitch other birds all around Who are lured to his tree by the musical sound We think we produce the best music by far But the Sabia laughs at our poor repertoire Give me a kiss and a hug and we'll look At butterfly wings in your butterfly book Come here to Grandma and listen to tales We'll ponder the wonder of wonderful whales We'll try to imagine the Sabia's song That has captured and raptured his world all along Come give me a kiss, it's time now for bed Let the butterflies tumble and twirl in your head Grab on to a whale.... Swim into the deep.... Let the sabia's music... put you to sleep |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling at you, Lady Santos! I'm keeping this for the NEXT time, because I've been told there WILL be a next time! Looking back on that day, I would do two things differently. (1) I wouldn't plan to come back to work, dress more casually, and have everyone sit in a circle on the floor. Yes, they're 6th graders, but the floor would have been more fun! (2) I would have taken more business cards. We have two of the kids who showed a lot of interest afterwards, coming to our next meeting in May. It WAS so much fun! I hope that more of you talk to the schools and see if they would like you to come and "share with their kids". The smiles alone are more than reward enough, believe me. It was SUCH a great time! [Wish I had thought to bring my camera. Reminder #3...] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: You should see some of these poems. WOW.... I'm raising my hand for next year.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ I KNOW just how much fun and pleasure you got out of this outing~ I do these poetry thingies with my son's fifth grade and my daughter's twelfth grade classes .... so rewarding~ Thanks for sharing~ And was wondering if Sir~ was allowed in school ? *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wouldn't it be nice if it were, Marge? Yes, this is the second time I got to participate with my granddaughter. The first time, in 3rd grade, for two days; this time, over 100 students. You should see some of the poems that were sent to me. I am so amazed at the minds of the young students. I have written to the teacher, and have asked her to share my letter with her student. And I left one last poem with them. It's April. I left Lyra's poem. "Slender Threads, Faith, and Time" I believe that on any level, even without them knowing the why for it, they will understand some part of it, in some way. And my hand is still "up" for next year. |
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