Open Poetry #6 |
Unseeing Eyes |
sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Your vacant stare The painful silence Echoes through this empty void Love so beautiful You so vibrant All of it now destroyed You look at me With unseeing eyes How can you miss my pain Not one tear From eyes unblinking I cry and I cry in vain I took for granted You would always be Now I find myself alone So many things I should have said If only I could have known I profess too late My need for you No joy on your slackened face I'm left with naught But my misery In this cold dark silent place One more time I kiss your lips Unmoving unfeeling you lie I take your hand And lose my heart As I wish you one final goodbye... Steven Seaman To thine own self be true... |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
I take your hand and lose my heart - such a beautiful but sad poem. One day you will find someone to look after the heart you give them. Thanks for sharing. ((HUGS)) |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
I always enjoy reading your poems, this one is no exception. A well thought out and executed poem, thanks for the read. Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
You have written so well about such a difficult event. One cannot help but feel the loss that you feel. Good writing! Danny ps. I'm and Okie in Tulsa! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well written. Enjoyed. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
*remembering just such a time* I feel your pain...it is very tangible through your words... Lovely poem... ) Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
The emotion really builds in this as you read on...by the time I read "I take your hand and lose my heart" I was totally captivated. Very nice write about the sad side of romance. James |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
HOORAY - Nice to see you again, S... Your poem is wonderful.. Hang around here awhile - We'll cheer you up.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sea-of, A beautiful sad poem, well done. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is so sad but it's so nice to see you back around |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
If this is about a personal experience, I'm so sorry you are going through this. You expressed all your emotions so beautifully, I've always enjoyed your work. Welcome home. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
woah i was just reading an oldie late last night and i saw your name and wondered where did yuh go and here you are its one o those coincedences that means i get all the credit for your return. o yuh great poem i remembered to say!! |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
If a wanderer can be said to have a home mine is here. Though my words have been absent for some time my heart has been with you all, my family. Thank you all for your kind words Steven Seaman To thine own self be true... |
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kalysp New Member
since 1999-09-14
Posts 4private |
I'm sorry you're hurting... I love to read your words... You have amazing talent.. Don't ever forget that... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
sea_of_okc~ powerfully sad. You made me cry. I'm sorry for your pain.-SEA |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
As always, your emotion is spilling out onto my desk, and I don't even mind! LOL (wiping it up a bit) Now...where the heck have you been? You know we desperately could use some of your er....cheer in Adult. (ahem!) You know, that's your home too! You know I'm here if you need to talk. Drop me a line if you wish. Mailbox always open. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I have no words to express what your poem made me feel and how magnificent I think it is, I'm afraid I can't do it justice by saying anything except....thank you. |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
Sea, This is so beautiful... I'm sorry for your loss... *she says beneath her tears* .... Thank you so much for sharing this with all of us... quite sincerely, molly aka sam |
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