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sea_of_okc
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since 1999-06-15
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Oklahoma City, OK, USA

0 posted 2000-02-10 03:17 PM


Your vacant stare
The painful silence
Echoes through this empty void
Love so beautiful
You so vibrant
All of it now destroyed

You look at me
With unseeing eyes
How can you miss my pain
Not one tear
From eyes unblinking
I cry and I cry in vain

I took for granted
You would always be
Now I find myself alone
So many things
I should have said
If only I could have known

I profess too late
My need for you
No joy on your slackened face
I'm left with naught
But my misery
In this cold dark silent place

One more time
I kiss your lips
Unmoving unfeeling you lie
I take your hand
And lose my heart
As I wish you one final goodbye...



 Steven Seaman
To thine own self be true...


© Copyright 2000 Steven Thomas Seaman - All Rights Reserved
jascanvey
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 130
England
1 posted 2000-02-10 03:26 PM


I take your hand and lose my heart - such a beautiful but sad poem. One day you will find someone to look after the heart you give them. Thanks for sharing. ((HUGS))
Craig
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since 1999-06-10
Posts 444

2 posted 2000-02-10 04:32 PM



I always enjoy reading your poems, this one is no exception. A well thought out and executed poem, thanks for the read.

 Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.


Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-02-10 04:39 PM


You have written so well about such a difficult event.  One cannot help but feel the loss that you feel.
Good writing!
Danny
ps. I'm and Okie in Tulsa!

Mike
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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

4 posted 2000-02-10 04:52 PM


Well written.  Enjoyed.
Breathe~
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 315
Washington...
5 posted 2000-02-10 06:08 PM


*remembering just such a time*

I feel your pain...it is very tangible through your words...

Lovely poem... )



 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-02-10 06:12 PM


The emotion really builds in this as you read on...by the time I read "I take your hand and lose my heart" I was totally captivated.  Very nice write about the sad side of romance.   James
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
7 posted 2000-02-11 08:12 AM


HOORAY - Nice to see you again, S...

Your poem is wonderful.. Hang around here awhile - We'll cheer you up..

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
8 posted 2000-02-11 08:22 AM


Sea-of,
A beautiful sad poem, well done.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
9 posted 2000-02-11 08:53 AM


This is so sad   but it's so nice to see you back around  
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
10 posted 2000-02-11 09:11 AM


If this is about a personal experience, I'm so sorry you are going through this.

You expressed all your emotions so beautifully, I've always enjoyed your work. Welcome home.  

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
11 posted 2000-02-11 10:27 AM


woah i was just reading an oldie late last night and i saw your name and wondered where did yuh go and here you are its one o those coincedences that means i get all the credit for your return.  o yuh great poem i remembered to say!!
sea_of_okc
Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568
Oklahoma City, OK, USA
12 posted 2000-02-11 07:59 PM


If a wanderer can be said to have a home mine is here.
Though my words have been absent for some time my heart has been with you all, my family.
Thank you all for your kind words

 Steven Seaman
To thine own self be true...



kalysp
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since 1999-09-14
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13 posted 2000-03-08 01:21 PM


I'm sorry you're hurting... I love to read your words... You have amazing talent.. Don't ever forget that...
SEA
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with you
14 posted 2000-03-08 02:35 PM


sea_of_okc~ powerfully sad. You made me cry. I'm sorry for your pain.-SEA
poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
15 posted 2000-03-08 03:53 PM


As always, your emotion is spilling out onto my desk, and I don't even mind!  LOL  (wiping it up a bit)  Now...where the heck have you been?  You know we desperately could use some of your er....cheer in Adult.  (ahem!)  You know, that's your home too!     You know I'm here if you need to talk.  Drop me a line if you wish.  Mailbox always open.  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
16 posted 2000-03-08 06:18 PM


I have no words to express what your poem made me feel and how magnificent I think it is, I'm afraid I can't do it justice by saying anything except....thank you.
MyPenNameIsSam
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 94
usa
17 posted 2000-03-08 07:40 PM


Sea,
This is so beautiful... I'm sorry for your loss... *she says beneath her tears* .... Thank you so much for sharing this with all of us...
quite sincerely,
molly aka sam

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