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“I wanted to say good bye”
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“I wanted to say good bye” |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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“I wanted to say good bye” When I touch the snow it melts And turns into water droplets Everything is like this I wanted to tell him sooner About the demons in my ears But I moved on now and so... Though they where still haunting my heart I want to believe him and all Won’t just melt away. I want to fall in love again But I will take my time and heal Because those little buggers cut And I have infections to care for I just really miss hearing The first words he said to me "Its ok I am here now" To think it was a light joke -Juju -<>-~-<>-~-<>- |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I like this; it's something many people can relate to. It has a very universal subject, which is good, easy to understand. Nice poetry. Cheers - Ed Momma says, "Life... is like a box full of chocolates, you never know when you're gonna get one with a nut in it". |
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oakgrove Junior Member
since 2006-02-01
Posts 12 |
"to think it was a light joke" that puts a secret and personal touch to the writing- i like that |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Thankyou guys, Juju -<>-~-<>-~-<>- |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"But I will take my time and heal Because those little buggers cut And I have infections to care for" Hear you... loud and clear! Good work. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
nicely written..enjoyed  hugs,g PS..You've mispelled your critique msg...  "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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