for Sunshine's last word Challenge...

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Open Poetry #32

for Sunshine's last word Challenge...

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2004-06-18 11:08 AM

adrift is
running away from me
at a healthy rate of
3 miles per minute
you just need to guess
whereabouts will it be
in an hour

my guess is adrift
will have drifted away
farther by one-hon-and-80

and that in degrees being
an about-turn
(from the direction
that you are headed in)
is what I keep wishing
that you would make
and come back to me

that is when adrift
will have returned to zero

~

zero velocity
is what I am stuck with
inertia-afflicted
at the wrong time
and in the wrong place

~

place your sight
straight ahead
into the distance
let the everstretching
length of your vision
fill the shape of
your eyes

witness the forever kiss
of the pair of deep blue
allow the moment
to fill the space of
your heart

then pace back a step
blink and repeat yourself
but this time
look at the spot
where you had stood
earlier
on the sand
and watch nature
fill your foot prints
ever so deftly

softly without hurting
almost as if
begging permission
to fill the gaps
in the sand

surely,
there is beauty
all around us
outlined in little ways
giving us limitless joy

~

... Sunshine's challenge is here:
/pip/Forum7/HTML/000618.html

and though I misunderstood it completely (all my fault) ... I think I just about managed to redeem myself

or did I not?

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-06-18 11:10 AM

LOL...redemption compleat!

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2004-06-18 12:28 PM

Excellent! hugs, Chris

Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
Hans Christian Anderson

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2004-06-18 12:30 PM

Absolutely perfect Sudhir, and by the way - you m'friend have quite the sense of humor, enjoyed both your inter-action in the challenge area, and this poem that sure met the challenge very much.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

4 posted 2004-06-24 11:59 AM

Thank you all very much...

and Karilea, it was fun, so thank you too

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