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Goodknight
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0 posted 2004-06-23 06:50 PM


So who saw the sky grow dim
Who saw the fix we are in
Clouds sailed off into minds
Watchers asked for words
To say but maybe to hear
Why was flying around our heads
Dread fell under and did spin a web
So what were we looking for this day
What led us to this fray
Did lightning sing a crackly song
I loved and didn’t last so long
A voice called innocence
Yelled into the night
No one got anything right
No one cared that they were lost
Love suffered from a frost
But life called innocence to come
To see the things that set us free
Don’t leave the fray
Don’t stop the fight
Come with me and let’s
Find what is right…


© Copyright 2004 Paul Tofte - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2004-06-23 07:01 PM


Paul

"Why was flying around our heads"

It flies around in my head too, and I can't tell you the answers, but I do know that it's always good to question.  Another wonderful pondering poem!

Sadelite
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2 posted 2004-06-23 07:14 PM


Paul,
  I couldn't say it any more perfect than Martie.  Enjoyed your poem
                Sadelite

Goodknight
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3 posted 2004-06-23 07:17 PM


Martie and Sadie - thanks for your comments - why spins around and in my head a lot - Paul
Susan
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4 posted 2004-06-23 07:31 PM


Enjoyed this.  I too was struck by the line about "why".  

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Goodknight
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5 posted 2004-06-23 07:36 PM


Thanks for reading and commenting Susan - Paul
Enchantress
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6 posted 2004-06-23 11:16 PM


Excellent write with much to ponder as usual Paul.
I enjoy the way you do that...leave us with something to think about.
Hugs~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

iliana
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7 posted 2004-06-24 12:02 PM


I'm going to call Innocence to come on back right now, but Life may fight with me a little about this.....enjoyed your write, Paul.  Really made me think.   ....jo
Earth Angel
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8 posted 2004-06-24 02:22 AM


"Love suffered from a frost"

~ That line really hit an old nerve! Very effective in eliciting an emotion that I had buried. I actually shivered when I read that line!

Warm hugs,
Linda

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9 posted 2004-06-24 02:46 AM


yeah...*sigh*
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