Open Poetry #27 |
Heart of Crystal - a little something from the archives |
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Heart of Crystal Such is it as she has transparency, most brilliant form likened to diamonds’ norm with exception, see the simplest rejection of heart break, so forlorn as in her inner chi shines this shimmer of light sigh There is not a crystal ball that holds the inner truths so well something once seen, heard like a bell something of life she would tell could she break past the crystal wall could you but hear the call as in her inner chi shines this shimmer of light sigh Were you to study crystallography or even her given autography and dispel any and all mystery would you therein find serenity or just her lovesome memory in her heart of crystal beauty as in her inner chi shines this shimmer of light sigh As grown from pure crystallite her charms for you would crystallize a vision of beauty before your eyes and you would wear her light and catch the rainbow of her bright and then you would hear her sigh but in her inner chi shines this shimmer of light sigh |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
What a jewel!!! Neeraja |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*sigh* once again I cannot find the right words...lovely tho.. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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pisumnux Junior Member
since 2003-06-11
Posts 49Troy, NY |
I loved this poem. It is very descriptive, the rhyme scheme (My poetry vocabulary is off today. I want to say consonance but I know it's wrong) and all the mentions and comparisons to crystal were great. Keep writing. "There are three things men can do with women: love them, suffer for them, or turn them into literature." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Just beautiful Karilea.. Lovely flow and rhythm. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Methinks you just described YOURSELF beautifully. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Thank you for releasing my tears. Patricia |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thanks for the repost Karilea, enjoyed the read |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I'd nickname you Krystal if karilea wasnt as beautiful as it is Your poetry mesmerizes me Thank you for sharing this treasure DQ . . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream . . . |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Crystal is another favorite of mine, always conveying the thought of pure, most beautiful, delicate...so very fascinating when the sun radiates through it...onto a wall or into the eye... A beautiful self portrait of a woman most deserving of this... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
YES! this is a beauty! reading again.... thank you for reposting |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Were you to study crystallography or even her given autography and dispel any and all mystery would you therein find serenity or just her lovesome memory in her heart of crystal beauty Does this ever sparkle pretty!! Karilea~ This is absolutely maaaavelous!! Seriously, it just radiates from you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God Karilea: this nearly made me cry it is so beautiful so utterly perfect . . . I - it reminded me of something so so very fragile . . . as in her inner chi shines this shimmer of light sigh This this part - perfection xxoo |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Awwww...Thank you Karilea for this emotionally touching and beautiful gift...How did I miss this beauty? back ~Paul |
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