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Prophecy, Part 3 Duet: (Sunshine & Patricia)
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Prophecy, Part 3 Duet: (Sunshine & Patricia) |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri 
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Prophecy, Part 3 The old Cornerstone Cafe Years ago, it inhabited up-and- running, slickly coming, wise words of cunning writers, now, a bit more still of chatter, his hideaway of brick and tables, cappuccino or wine, remained his escape from himself, certainly from all the ancient lives he'd lived to pen, in tantalizing, mesmerizing, fantasizing legend, poetic reminders of who he wasn't. Tell-tale character crinkles lineated his true story clearly, more vividly than any of his napkin scribbles, and were he that twenty two year old again, he would have pulled a Marlboro to his lips, while dotting i's and linking curves to ohs through his typical vehicle of compose. How many wasted napkins bore her name? Sweltering in early summer's solstice twilight, now he finds only missing thoughts stray words mislaid pieces absent of something, some thing uncommon, foreign to his frame of reference. Vulnerable, futile attempts dismally failed to produce salvageable storylines While bittersweet coffee only stirred her memory He mentally excused his word block with a habitual diversion tactic How many wasted thoughts bore her scent? innocently, half-heartedly flirting with seasoned hash slingers was this older man's attempt to tease and flaunt his wisely weathered taunting of the leaner, greener girls. But this night even that was distasteful... remaining unflavored by a missing ingredient the seasoning of his soul. Darkened windows evening shadows even his memories saw hues of a slender redhead that had once walked toward him. The scent of cinnamon still in his core. He attempts to capture her fragrance in his napkin net of phrases Though her scent remained illusive, fading quickly in summer's frothy air. His pen, almost weightless of ink, only she holds the fluid from which to hydrate it again. His words become lone cripples, paralyzed by her ghost. Yet he knows his majestic auburn moth flutters delicately among the most common of night's lamps. In the dusky evening glow, destiny's light draws her to his soul. ~*~ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-18-2003 09:42 AM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
And...he sits in quiet pose, a mere nod waking the tale of his dream as a pen softly scrawls the once clean cloth... now smudged by an endless series of mistaken thoughts and half words... This is a very spellbinding story...You girls have no idea how much I am enjoying this... No idea.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Patricia and Karilea... This is fantastic! The best one so far..in my mind anyway.. Wonderful imagery and the words in italics left me shaking my head in awe. Beautiful blending of two like minds here ladies. ~Smiles & Hugs to you both, Nancy~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Aha! Imagine my pleasure at seeing Prophecy, Part 3 in the list of titles!--and ladies, did you ever deliver! Might I suggest you skip writing a Part 4 and just jump into writing a book together! It'll be a bestseller for sure!  Huggums, girlfriends! Linda |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm at a loss as what to say...brilliant comes to mind. I love every single line and the imagery is is superb. I could see it all. Well done ladies. I'm adding this to my library. Maree  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Another exceptional chapter in this excellent blending of two poets talents... the chemistry between you two is wonderful and allowing you to touch places deep to find your inspiration. This write had many gifts...what I particularly enjoyed what the way you teased and pleased all the senses with your imagery and detail... I could smell the scents wafting within your words. Lovely ladies...encore encore  No matter what the differences |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, what can I say? Patricia is the one with the gift, folks...and she's already sent Part 4...so crack the whip...I've got to put in my one cent....  y'all... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Part 4...oh yeah....waiting very impatiently.... What's the delay girls? Get crackin'!! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, I have been completely captivated by this writing. I must say that it is incredible that this is a collaboration, unless the two of you are Siamese twins! This is close to being worthy of "masterpiece" status. I'm reminded of "The Love Song of Alfred J.....". You really have something special here. Leave it to two midwestern gals to write a down-to-earth piece of such impact. Congrats to you both!  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a wonderful duet, from two of my favorite poets! Excellent storyline...told with such insight and imagery. TD |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Karilea & Patricia, Holy cow! These are going into my library right now. How incredible is this write! You two are the BOMB... You stole my heart and filled it with dreams.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Loved this series you two, there is so much stimuli going on in the room, passing between words, gathering together in your hearts, and a oneness through the baring of your souls. Absolutely fascinating poetry. Bravo Ladies~ |
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Forgotenandgone Member
since 2003-05-07
Posts 52NC |
sorry i pressed the wrong thing.... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Gals this is definitely exceptional in so many many ways......super writing! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done you two! you not only paint the scenery here, but build the character and something that seems to lie underneath the words to just sort of swirl and tug at the edges of your mind... I have to say the two of you are some of the best at writing together that I have read....seamless...and a timeless tale.. I enjoyed! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What do you think, Patricia? Should we let them peek at Part 4? Yes? Well, then, let's do it! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"In the dusky evening glow, destiny's light draws her to his soul." I am enjoying these very much! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Goodness gracious you two!! This is excellent it really is. hugs, Chris |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
So as the number one fan of this series I am offering the following links in order to expedite even more responses. Prophecy - Part 1 Prophecy - Part 2 Prophecy - Part 4 Prophecy - Part 5 If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Each one Is sooooo good ARCTIC WIND |
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