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The Saga of a Prince #1 and # 2
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The Saga of a Prince #1 and # 2 |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. 
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The Saga of a Prince As a lonely prince i lay awake hearing your song of love in distress. awaken i saddle my steed and with a thundering of hooves race to capture your plea. in the darkness of night i see the candle flickering in your window casting your silhouette. with the dust drifting and the moon peeking through clouds i cross the wooden bridge. closer i get to your song, brighter the candle glows. my heart pounds with the rhythm of my steeds hooves pounding the bridge as i cross. through the open gates and into the garden i ride, only to see two silhouettes in the moon light embraced. with ache in my heart and tears on my face i draw my shining sword ending my dolour. It's the quality of the complement that i feel, not the quanity. [This message has been edited by QjQ (06-01-2003 07:41 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) For so long I've had to endure the yearning of love, dearest friend, I long to get my first kiss (I'm 19) and wonder what it must feel like as I dream of it seemingly every night! (sigh) May your fair lady always ride beside you from here on in, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Glenn, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a story! love this! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Great Job Glenn, not shabby at all. Like it, and thanx for the link, sorry I had missed this.... Hmmmm, might that have been I within the silhouette? Or another dastardly scoundrel....perhaps? |
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JilGirl Member
since 2003-05-24
Posts 364Washington |
Gracious! What a saga! Anticipating, exciting beginning brings the reader to an ending so sad, yet wondering exactly what the prince used his sword for (?) I like your style and open ending! Perhaps there's a "Chapter 2" on the horizon? Fabulous write! Blessings! Shirl Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Wonderful story, but such a sad ending.  I hope your next one has a happier conclusion. Huggles, Marti |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
glenn: mann you had me there for a sec beautiful story - cant we make this one into one of those choose your own ending stories? briliant write Q truly xxoo |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dang QjQ, this was amazing! It would be nice if we could choose our happy endings. Problem is, we'd probably make them all happy, and then we wouldn’t know the difference any more. It’s nice to read, how it really happens, sometimes. Ahhh heck, they’ll be more princesses. Hang in there QjQ. Oh, and by the way, it did kinda look like Barry, riding off with her... Keep that between me and you though, OK? lol Richy |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
do to many request heres another ending, The Saga of a Prince As a lonely prince i lay awake hearing your song of love in distress. awaken i saddle my steed and with a thundering of hooves race to capture your plea. in the darkness of night i see the candle flickering in your window casting your silhouette. with the dust drifting and the moon peeking through clouds i cross the wooden bridge. closer i get to your song, brighter the candle glows. my heart pounds with the rhythm of my steeds hooves pounding the bridge as i cross. through the open gates and into the garden i ride, As moon beams flicker through the boughs, two silhouettes appear, one is her. [This message has been edited by QjQ (06-01-2003 07:32 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
So, we can change the endings whenever we don't get the one we want? LOL, wish it were true in the real stories. Good write, Q. But I do believe it was your reflection bouncing off the mirror, or an optical illusion? |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
Midnitesun, if at first you don't succeed try again!!  lol lmao[This message has been edited by QjQ (06-01-2003 07:49 PM).] |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
I'm much prefer the first one. It captures a deep sadness that I can really identify with. Both though, were excellent writes! "Cuidado con mi corazon."--R. Martin |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
QJQ...I enjoyed them both...the first I agree, brought the romance of sadness to the end. |
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JilGirl Member
since 2003-05-24
Posts 364Washington |
Well, now, there you've gone and done it, QjQ! You've wriggled another reply outa me! Two endings -- My goodness! With your imagination, There'll probably be MORE! I, too liked the first one. It left me wondering and that keeps the intrigue. But, then many of your other writes have kept me hanging, too! GOOD job on all I've read so far! Blessings! Shirl Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Very well done and I love Littlewings idea of making this into a choose your own ending story, boy I had a dilly  |
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