Looking at Me (repost in response to Honeybee's challenge)

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JP
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since 1999-05-25

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Loomis, CA

0 posted 2003-05-01 10:05 AM

This is a repost in response to Honeybee's challenge "A letter to your body" I thought this kinda fit the challenge.

Looking At Me

Looking down to see the scars,
scars from battles, some won, some lost.
The jagged line across the wrist
a battle of the soul - won or lost?
I can't really be sure.
The quarter-sized scar in the thigh,
.45 caliber they said when they pulled it out.
"You're damn lucky soldier, it's only a flesh wound."
How little they knew that it wounded much more.
We won that battle, so they tell me.
Years later, the battle still rages
and I am constantly on the losing side.
Many scars on the hand and fingers
from little battles through time.
Fights with the wall, a window, a bottle.
Too many mini fights to waste time on remembrance.
The counselor tells me that these are winner's scars.
"You are here, alive, and well - you have won"
Looking at him, I laugh inside.
How little he knows about war - no one ever wins.
Some of us just survive, and lose for eternity.
The scars inside are the most vicious looking.
Jagged, raw, ugly scars on my heart, my mind.
Those are the battle wounds most apparent to me.
I know longer see the outside marks, unless I look.
But I forever feel the inside disfigurement.
How can I heal the scars of murder?
How can I heal the wounds of a liar?
How can the spirit ever soar with wings clipped
by my own refusal to forgive?
I sigh, and look at the scars of battle
Some won - to leave me physically alive
others lost - to leave me in eternal death

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-05-01 10:09 AM

JP
Well done, enjoyed the write.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

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Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2003-05-01 10:14 AM

"The scars inside are the most vicious looking.
Jagged, raw, ugly scars on my heart, my mind.
Those are the battle wounds most apparent to me.
I know longer see the outside marks, unless I look.
But I forever feel the inside disfigurement."
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This is very powerful, unique and worthly submission for the challenge. Thank you for participating and allowing us to delve into your thoughts. I'm saving this~

Take care,
Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

JP
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

3 posted 2003-05-02 09:47 AM

Thanks guys, I appreciate the thoughts.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

Poet deVine

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4 posted 2003-05-02 11:01 AM

Well done! When I saw that you had taken on this challenge, I knew it would be a good poem. I am not disappointed. Your reference to outer and inner scars is insightful - I never would have thought of it. Again, JP, well done.

Brad Majors

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Georgia

5 posted 2003-05-02 12:49 PM

well done!

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

6 posted 2003-05-03 04:10 AM

JP:

damn - this one got to me good

far beyond the challenge
you dig deep within your soul
and let us all glimpse you for you
a challenge indeed and a brave one
at that

this is brilliant writing
and I am proud of you
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (05-03-2003 04:12 AM).]

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2003-05-04 03:49 AM

WOW! I printed this one to keep JP and hope you don't mind. I think if I were to talk to me it would be to the scars inside as well, as outside too, as you have done (only I could never do a poem this good), but I sure enjoy those of you who can. Excellent writing, and you more than met her challenge.

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 2003-05-04 08:24 AM

This is exceptional, m'friend... You never fail to bring your reader into the depths of your heart... Thank you...

Midnitesun

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Gaia

9 posted 2003-05-04 04:22 PM

The scars inside are the most vicious looking.
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oui, je comprends
c'est vrai
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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

10 posted 2003-05-08 07:52 PM

From your pain came powerful poetry!

Healing hugs,
EA

jaysh
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IL, USA

11 posted 2003-05-08 08:27 PM

wow beautiful, really enjoyed it, your expressed you feelings so well

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2003-05-17 04:49 PM

Nice expression of your feelings...James

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

13 posted 2003-05-17 04:55 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh JP, this is very heartaching, sweet friend, I think we all need scars as badges to show that we are fortunate and strong and know we are the peacekeppers that can sympathize for all those who experience new scars each new day! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderfully said, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet JP, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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