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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Lamentations, chapter 1 2: She weepeth sore in the night, and her tears are on her cheeks: among all her lovers she hath none to comfort her: all her friends have dealt treacherously with her, they are become her enemies. Tears flowing with fears growing Abandon None showing of her knowing, Friends that were comfort not her All are gone Enemies now they will be, Just robbing while she’s sobbing Abandon They’re stealing all her feelings. It was too late for travel, The freezing rain gave only to peril, With roads turned into dark ice, Walking by the café tea might be nice So he carefully went in, It was a place where he had often been And the waitress knew him well Getting his order before he could tell. It was nearly empty there Only a lady filled another chair Even though not very near He could see the tracks of many a tear Of a soul in turmoil deep With loneliness of someone forsaken Who just had ended a weep, He went near and asked “is this seat taken?” Gloom |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The start of an adventure....or a step in the direction of a place that even angels fear to tred? Enticing |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, RSWells, Pleased you enjoyed it, Few angels tread about where I tend to go, As for a start of an adventure, isn’t everything? Gloom |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah the stories of the people around us and the acts of connecting with those people can be miscronstrued and or delightful... enjoyed this Gloom... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Intentions are everything. I love this and I'd like to read the next chapter. Great read. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Read and digested... M |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
I shall agree with RSWells... so now you have notice that I am looking forward to a story in the making... but be ware... I would enjoy several chapters. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Cpat Hair, regards2you, Nakdthaoughts, & Soleil Noir, The second part of this is now posted, Thank you all for the kind words and support. Gloom |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
a most intriguing tale...so you say the second part is already posted? THen I shall go right now and find it. Very much enjoyed this write. ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
interesting |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I love character study poems and I am quite eager to go onto the next one. Really enjoyed this adventure so far. Merry Christmas to you and the cat |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Beware, I am following this one, for I have no fear of treading unfamiliar paths. A very interesting story unfolding here. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Professor I read the second one first, and it took me here. What a gifted story teller you are, as well as fine poet!! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, I read the second one first, too, but now I'm going to read it again. Very good reading, I might say....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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