blue striped melody [[don't waste a word challege]]

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Open Poetry #23

blue striped melody [[don't waste a word challege]]

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2002-11-21 02:14 PM

'Cowardice', must stand pretending not
that myself be all which
lips give timeless life to.
Filter through these aimless days.
I’m lost in the midst
of this fire-engine red
dream. [Pick it apart baby]
Dents and scratches, scuffed rubber
never really did belong with me.

Entwining such a pinkish nightmare.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-22-2002 02:27 AM).]

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

1 posted 2002-11-21 03:54 PM

cool, although it will take me a couple more read through to decide what I think it means.

one bit: you used to twice.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

2 posted 2002-11-21 04:25 PM

This is great! glad to see you joined in the fun! I enjoyed your poem, very deep and very awsome.

Never be normal!

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

3 posted 2002-11-22 02:27 AM

oh, you're right. i didn't even notice.

but ::poof:: i changed it.

can anyone guess where it was? heh.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2002-12-15 03:31 PM

Jen~
Well, look what I found back here.
Very cool write and an awesome answer to the challenge.
Gee...I could NEVER figure out where the other 'to' was. LOL
Nicely done, Jen.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-12-23 12:10 PM

Jen,
I see that yr challenge also
posits a challenge.

Like the swaggering of this.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

6 posted 2002-12-29 10:30 PM

"I’m lost in the midst
of this fire-engine red
dream."

Your Poetry coupled with Sigor Ros is a moment worth looking forward to. I liked this a lot Jen, you're brilliant you know that?

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

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