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Passions Choka |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA 
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Our workshop this month is "Tanka" and "Choka." The Japanese Choka is actually a group venture, and I thought it would be fun to involve everyone here in Open. So where do we start? Understanding what a Choka is would be good, eh? One poet begins the diatribe with the first 5-7-5-7-7 stanza, followed by the next poet, and the next, etc... The stickler is that each stanza has to relate semantically to the one before it (and by definition, the one subsequent). The Japanese had a tendency to create these poetic masterpieces all in one sitting - We can't do that, because we aren't all sitting in one place - but we certainly can write a sequential piece. So - Rather than responding with the normal "Great poem," let's each add a verse. Make it relate in some way to the one before you - and count your syllables - 5-7-5-7-7. I'll start...   Streams meandering Through time in serpentine way Flow into rivers Converging as one to sea The wisdom of a lifetime [This message has been edited by Nan (10-27-2002 09:22 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Eyes closed hearing calm Of waters flowing throughout Kissing river's touch On its way forevermore While carrying thoughts of mine BC [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (10-27-2002 10:04 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Soul spirits slip by, silently drifting past me. Joined life harmonies. Fleeting moments synchronize. Life renews itself again. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
confluence of souls flows through our arteries wise words ever speak waterfalls of allusions gifting us forefathers love  (smiles) Oh my gosh, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I have missed your lovely words so much! This would make a wonderful challenge for you, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Changing before my eyes, purple clouds hovering above the ocean rise high, higher, into a range of towering mountains. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Morning mist rises Through cedar and pine towers Meeting warm of day I realize that I am So small in the scheme of things. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (10-27-2002 10:22 PM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
After Noah's, re: forefathers Freedom runs pure still Mist nation splashing sincere God's fluidity, Swift, swirling ebbtides of love, Floats on warm currents of grace. ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (10-28-2002 11:08 AM).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
floating sluggishly debris makes it way downsteam destruction its wake who dares wade into the path of yesterdays memories |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Cloud, mist, mountain, sky sentinel amid the swirl which ever changing to the viewers eye whose mood reflects awe of all in view |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Mirrored glass above Darkened waters flow beneath.. Calm and rage combined. Leaf flows lazily on top Unaware of force below. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
echoes fill the air with nature's wilderness call reminiscing now in the smoke of mountain mists on the miracle of life Lyra |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Now in quiet calm No sound of paddles on birch bark Breaking the silence Metal and fiber glass canoes And the noise of boat motors paladin [This message has been edited by paladin (10-28-2002 03:37 PM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Barge filthy garbage, One hundred leagues to deep sea, Drown all your past pain, Skiing toward future's lighthouse, Skimming but nature's treasures. . . . . . Nan, This is my second one and not sure that's ok, so edit as needed, but, must say Jamie's is one of my favorites, and wrote this right after hers. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Amber light shinning Giving comfort in the night Ships leaving their berth Storm clouds gather over head As gulls look for their next meal |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Stuck in an oil slick Carcasses of dead birds lay Among shell and rock Unnoticed by ignorance Man writing his epitaph (couldn't resist another one sorry) |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Mankind's signature Laden with inclement force Etched upon our earth Heeding ancestral warning May yield worldwide salvation |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sediment slowly releases changes till flood comes to carry time and the banks start their shifting and the seasons lend to rhyme |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
A silent aching Wings fluttering in spirit Pure truth to reside Opening discernment's door Submerging, in wisdom's light [This message has been edited by NewEnglandlazurlu (10-28-2002 03:56 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Timeless flowing Life carries hopes of Peace within, gathers truths of old, merged with new world attitudes, Destiny is unfolding. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
water smoothing rock gurgling old spirits laughter come to the water refreshing souls memories everclear waters through time |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Spirits drenched in pure, Wash never away their plight, Bold ancestors weep, Native raging tides of tears, Glisten their babbling brook! ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I bear sky's colors And make a path for the wind And fog for the night And mist for morning's meadows And rainbows from stormy black |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
To greet ashen shores where over-thrown trees that weep with fingernail leaves curve and fall like deep women in climbing degrees |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Can I add another? Oh, thank you kind lady! Peaceful solitude Intrinsic to our spirit Lost in pensive thought Standing on the edge of time River leads nowhere special Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Suddenly earth, sky, tree, and mountain are carried off, shrouded in fog. Gentle waves push brown kelp beds through the glades of afternoon. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ashes fall like rain into the meandering of a simple stream into the swollen river forever to ocean's claim |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
tears now meet with salt dust to dust, ashes meet wind wind carries all on as thought meets soul in this realm where river runs, cool and clear |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
The rocks of ages Polish beneath passing sands As life continues The cacoon of forever Into infinities change. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
flowing forever A timeless world of spirits Exist together In the tranquil world of calm And the river will run on |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
(I'm just here to applaud everyone else's work......this is beautiful!) |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
To eternity In currents against the tides Carrying mankind To places as yet unknown In visions of a new world |
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Tammy Blessing Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 366PA |
Silent river runs Passing through life's changing tide Irridecent glow Of all lives past and future Collecting in tidal pool  This is truly wonderful everyone!! My  to you!! I'm so glad I could be a part of it!Tammy |
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Tammy Blessing Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 366PA |
Sorry Nan popped in before me..so I had to add one more.. The new world gleams, green As visions of life Catch mankind on the way to the flowing river Where life can begin anew.. |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Placid river stream Flowing forever onward To the deep teeming Life weaving its way beneath Shadow of turning begun |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Turning shadowed thoughts into streams of consciousness, synchronicity, melding hearts in harmony, allowing Love to prevail. **************************************** Thank you, Nan, for the inspiration, and the chance to share the flow of Love and Harmony with so many creative souls. **************************************** May ripples of LOVE |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
With heart in one's mind raised above our weary souls, we enter the water. Careful not to lose our foot, gaining the body's power. Thank you Nan for my first ever Tanka, and KC for letting me know. A small piece of a beautiful chain. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Random vortices Bring updrafts of histories, Each one a new plane Though different, still the same. Dreams end, but memories thrive In this river of our life. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (10-29-2002 09:41 PM).] |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All dreams come to pass Some realized and some not Lest we venture forth There can be no successes Fantasies may become real |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
To try means success Failure comes only from lack Of persuing dreams Reach up to the celestial Fulfillment will come to you. [This message has been edited by Denise (10-30-2002 10:18 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now, a final reach, to pull the moon with its stars close to sunny skies for rivers should never end and fortunes take one step more |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
The sybol of life And of energy as well I will keep living The river will keep flowing no one can stop a river No one can stop me (I know I added an extra line, but I just had to!) |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It must be the Wind Blowing its own direction Unfettered its course Turning spontaneously Met with new experience |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It charts its own course Lifting the unsuspecting Over obstacles Once thought insurmountable Revealing bright new vistas |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
churning and whirling carrying thought across time on whispers of air the continuum of life hinges fate of future days Lyra |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
and whispers of air are the sweeet voices of now meandering through pathways of the heart... the whisper of now is HOPE |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hope springs eternal, gathering great momentum as it winds downstream, filling hearts along the way with dreams of Peace for mankind. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Dreams of peace for all while floating down the river are seen forever by eyes of everyone who dares to look up to God [This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-31-2002 02:52 AM).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Look up to the skies Beyond the moon and the stars For there lies the peace For the mind and the spirit It is in the hand of God |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Peace reigns in heaven, The home of our Creator. Rise on angel wings With a prayer on our lips And a song within our hearts. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
How beauty does pass From one heart to another Muses from heaven Touch the hand of each poet And now, look at the splendor |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A Passionate Place Brimming with poetic hearts Pouring out verses Sharing innermost secrets Worldwide arms enclasped as one. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A circle of friends Like family together We meet here in heart Sharing secrets and prayers From all over God's world, here [This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-31-2002 09:44 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lo, a choka, born like a wellspring of hope, flows beyond its own banks feeding, nurturing with hope a well of life...poetry |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Words well up inside, then overflow onto blue. Where poetry lives within hearts, minds, kindred souls, uplifting thoughts may prevail. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
as poetry flows and we learn from each other a family born of the loving and caring a nurture of soul and of word Lyra |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The song has begun Poetry sings from the heart And fills another, Inspiring harmony As crickets at twilight's hour |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Crickets cheery chirp echoes poetic heartsongs. Diversity rules, welcoming all who read here, to join our passionate home. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Spirited cadre Gathering at the river Poet ink caressing The baptismal soul of all Who partake of the wellspring~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
We kindred spirits Drink from life's flowing river, Gathering meaning So we may share poetry With those who care to listen. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Dusk peacefully falls Upon desultory day Time for reflection Of inward accomplishment Pondering tomorrow's dawn |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Mourn not the morning, for it reflects upon night's yearning to begin fresh with thoughts of Hope and Peace, Goodwill to all living things. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Hope and peace abide within the center of life faith and trust reside as hearts share with each other. The dawning of a new day. If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-01-2002 03:59 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
As the sun shines through The glorious clouds of God He puts faith and trust In the hearts of those who heed. Full of love and joy we share |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, joyous dawning Writ in paletted colors Across the meadow Come ye friends in gathering Shafts of light from poetry~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
(just to bump it back to the top) |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
we have discovered That the river we all love Flows not with water And begins not at a stream, It all starts with us! peace~Wind~ [This message has been edited by Wind (11-02-2002 03:10 PM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
We heed friendship's call gather our spirits as one a river of thought swells with love and poetry words overflowing the rocks Lyra |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Words overflowing into the river of life where our spirits meet building a family here through loving words of kindness |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tumultuous flow Steady quill in ready spill Penning poetry Meandering thoughts coursing Cascading from the inkwell~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Back to  The Top[This message has been edited by Wind (11-03-2002 01:12 PM).] |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
A river of eternal dreams Drifts along without a sound A place of untouched beauty Where peace can always be found I am in motion |
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Tammy Blessing Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 366PA |
What beauty we find As this river flows onward Moving poetry Filling us with its caring Flowing vessel of sharing |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh my, look what I bumped into! A passionate poet's dream come true, a superb group effort that flows in peaceful harmony. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sharing flowing words Through Passions In Poetry As the rivers flow Through the wondrous minds of poets Where seasons of nature dwells |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
float up to the sky, some will fall away like rain, some stay for a while, forever wandering clouds, The sky will be our limits "Sticks and stones will break my bones, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Mind’s eye limitless Illuminating a thought Spinning in our mind Thoughts become an idea That we weave into a poem |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Mindlessness limits. Illuminated minds thrive. Woven dreams in rhyme. Endless possibilities, connecting poetic thoughts. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Woven dreams in rhyme Flowing like a calm river Through hearts of poets From the whole world united In love and peace together |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
creativity fantasy painted of dreams with brushstrokes of love colorful rivers of thought weave words into poetry Lyra |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Thoughts are love brushes, Magically dip them in words, with peace and with joy on a canvas without sound nor sight, but with love for all I have sent you nothing but angels, and I have placed nothing but miracles before you. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
And with love for all Thoughts are flowing like rivers From the love brushes of our family of friends, While painting pictures with words |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I have never wrote a choka, before. But, here is my attempt. I hope this is right. Of the love held deep within Of natures colors The true beauty can be seen If only you look around |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
for it is ahead, The river we created It flows on within a river that never ends listen to the wind font> Never be normal! [This message has been edited by Wind (12-03-2002 07:36 AM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Like this post That never ends And the river Bend after bend The End? [This message has been edited by Toerag (12-03-2002 10:09 AM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Life is going on as the river never ends through words of poets thoughts and dreams of hearts will flow to reach out in love to all |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you guys choka me up |
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