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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-08-01 01:09 PM

4/1

"Love is the flower you've got to let grow"
-John Lennon

Pure seeds will disembark capricious winds,
are littered from the flight of birds by chance,
the roots so fine and fragile can't rescind
trust then is in the rain, sun, happenstance

A subtle stem in shyness moves aloft,
vulnerable it merely wants to live,
it longs that life for it is naught but soft
and time allows the beauty that it gives

With luck paternal sun will warm it's way,
maternal rain will nourish her along,
sweet zephyrs shall encourage dance in sway
and birds provide the music for her song

Sweet flower blooms wide open in broad day
young and proud with beauty unsurpassed
innocence bursts forth it's fresh bouquet
too often though the miracle won't last;

For beauty's even coveted by trolls
whose heavy hands more Steinbeck's mice than men
are attached to heartless blackened souls
who seek control of beauty's how and when

and so they wrench the flower from the stem
they bruise the petal opened in Love's light
their curse is that the beauty was for them
flinched flower recoils from beastly night

Eventually the ogre moves along
with no respect to unsuspecting fields
trampled in his wake's a flower wronged
and fear she think's the payoff to her yield;

Sweet flower Love renews perennial
it's own bloom shines beyond the darkest night
it's measure is beyond millenial
it cures the deepest wound, it fears not fright

The strength, the stress your bud bears wound so tight
need be released by rain's tears, kind sunlight
crouch not in shadows blossom please ignite
renew your life, Love pollinates in flight

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

[This message has been edited by RSWells (08-01-2002 01:37 PM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-08-01 01:36 PM

For so many, many reasons,
this is a keeper...
and a treasure...

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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2 posted 2002-08-01 03:09 PM

Richard

A stunning, thoughtful poem.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-08-01 03:38 PM

Pure seeds will disembark capricious winds,
are littered from the flight of birds by chance,
the roots so fine and fragile can't rescind
trust then is in the rain, sun, happenstance

A subtle stem in shyness moves aloft,
vulnerable it merely wants to live,
it longs that life for it is naught but soft
and time allows the beauty that it gives

With luck paternal sun will warm it's way,
maternal rain will nourish her along,
sweet zephyrs shall encourage dance in sway
and birds provide the music for her song
=======================================

For beauty's even coveted by trolls
whose heavy hands more Steinbeck's mice than men
are attached to heartless blackened souls
who seek control of beauty's how and when

and so they wrench the flower from the stem
they bruise the petal opened in Love's light
their curse is that the beauty was for them
flinched flower recoils from beastly night

Eventually the ogre moves along
with no respect to unsuspecting fields
trampled in his wake's a flower wronged
and fear she think's the payoff to her yield;
======================================
Allow me to state the obvious....

you just took, rhyme,(internal rhymes) cadence, vocab, verbiage, assonance, alliteration, poetic phrasing, imagery, personification, theme, metaphor,(extended metaphor) analogy, expression, emote, conflict and resolution to most impressive heights.
I'm quite sure there is much more here that my lacking of poetic terms has missed...as well as my being giddy from the poetic pleasures of reading this.
very very well done poet sir.

Tell me we belong together
Dress it up with the trappings of love
Ill be captivated, Ill hang from your lips
Instead of the heartache from above

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2002-08-01 04:10 PM

Richard - This is simply wonderful. I enjoyed the entirety of this piece, but loved the finale most..."Love pollinates in flight..".. indeed..

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2002-08-01 04:20 PM

there is a song that only poetry can sing. . . words from the soul. . .

this, is such a poem. . . superb Sir. . . flowing and excellent in thought and image. . . indeed, one of your best. . .

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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

6 posted 2002-08-01 08:13 PM

I'm not quite sure if my words would do your poem great justice, but I simply loved it..gave me goosepimples

Kristen

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2004-02-16 12:40 PM

Is there a chance you could re-post this one Richard, too good to be buried in the archives. Have a GREAT day! Loved this, and of course if I could, I would learn how to write from you, but well...yanno?

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