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Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

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Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2003-02-23 08:23 PM

The blue softens
with the rise of morning
pulling reds and pinks
from the horizon.
Wil'o Wisps burn away
with the mist,
leaving behind only
birdsong and dew.
Clouds drift
languidly through lavender,
trailing a stream of geese
honking reveille.

The sun rises and falls,
singeing rouge into cerulean
as afternoon and evening
pass at a gasp.
Wil'o Wisps burn brightly,
while reds and pinks
are pushed into the horizon
to the croaks and chirps
of frogs trolling Taps.

VAS Challenge

cinnamongirl
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since 2003-02-02

Posts 217

1 posted 2003-02-23 08:30 PM

Aaaahhhhh... such a wonderful, vivid, living, breathing reverie of a poem. Magic. I so loved the scenery, the music, the play.

True magic. Just beautiful.

Thank you for such a peaceful dream of gentle reality...

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-02-23 08:49 PM

This is awesome

Cold hands means a warm heart

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-02-23 09:13 PM

Ah...this is wonderful...
Fantastic imagery...much enjoyed by this reader.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2003-02-23 09:44 PM

I loved this... the sky is such an awe-inspiring and constantly changing sight,and you captured it rather well!

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2003-02-23 11:42 PM

very beautiful, you wrote a lot without adjectives...of course you used adjectives, too, though...colors are adjectives, but it's a wonderful poem!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

6 posted 2003-02-24 12:33 PM

Colors aren't adjectives when I use them as nouns. *wink*

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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7 posted 2003-02-24 04:05 AM

brilliant write!

Magicmystery
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since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2003-02-26 09:43 PM

Ever Cool !!!!! I just popped in to see if you could inspire my son's homework assignment.... I am inspired instead.... What a great plan... trading your ajectives in for more flexible adverbs.... you animated the sky!!!!

Much enjoyed... and into my library it goes.

Sherry

Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today.

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