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I Knew This Is True
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I Knew This Is True |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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Looked into the dark, I saw you. You seemed to be kind, you seemed to be nice. You held out your hand, smiling at me. I was scared, I didn’t know what to do. You comforted me, you prayed for me. You held me in your arms, you gave me warm. I wanted to trust you, but I was afraid. I wanted to hold your hand, I needed you. Looked into your eyes, I was afraid no more. I held your hand, I was afraid to be lost. You held me tight, you led me to light. You gave me strength to overcome all. I ought to thank you, but I don’t know how. I asked your name, but you just smiled. You didn’t asked for anything, You just helped me grow to be a stronger man. I wanted to see you again, I heard a voice said you’re always with me. I knew this is true and I felt comfort. I knew this is true because you said it to me. Love, |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well aries..I think this is great for a beginner...  It has heartfelt emotion - which is often the important thing...and also very nice rhythm...well done..  KI am a refugee of logic...insisting |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
thank you! I will work hard. I'm not a great fan of books but I'm going to buy some English textbooks. And I've pleasure reading all the poems at Passion! Lizzy ~A little sour add to taste of life. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lizzy, the flow here shows your talent. Keep writing sweet one. ~hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
I like what you've written here. It is quite scary at first. But when you learn to trust someone, and you know you can lean on him and depend on him, it doesn't seem so scary afterall, does it? |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh yes, this is really well done. I totally enjoyed it. Keep writing. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
I enjoyed this one. Peaches |
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rebekah33 Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 140MD/NJ |
That first step with opening your heart to someone is the hardest...good luck with all. -R. "So stop and love and dance and live and laugh until you cry" Edwin McCain |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Vivian, your beautiful words always shine with love and beauty, this poem touched my heart so deeply! (sigh) May love forever give you comfort and joy your loving heart deserves! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vivian, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Your poetry has lots of heart...James |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is wonderful I love the way this made me feel |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Trust...it is the foundation of all we are. I could feel the timid need in this, the shy art of reaching...Good job!! |
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