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The Show |
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Jason Daniels New Member
since 2001-10-13
Posts 1Georgia, USA |
The Show as I sat there and watched I saw the story unfold when I listened, as well I heard the words left untold and the lies in the lives of those poor wretched souls who've been imprisoned since youth within the life they'd been sold and they can't escape now because they think they're too old so they sit back and watch to see the story unfold they will listen, as well to hear the words left untold and the lies in the lives of those poor youthful souls who want something for nothing and are, themselves, the ones sold only to learn their mistake as, they too, slowly grow old now, as we sit here and watch we'll see the story unfold if we listen, as well we'll hear the words left untold and the lies in the lives of those misguided souls who've come here to bargain for more power and gold though it is never enough to replace what they've sold because, in spite of it all they can't stop growing old. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Well done Jason I enjoyed the read. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I believe you have done very well with your first post....Nicely said and very true. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! This is a great poem for your first post... Please check your e-mail for a special greeting! Karilea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great first post Jason! Hope to see more from you!  WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! ~Nancy Lee~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey there...  What a simply wonderful way to start my Saturday morning... I'm smilin'...  You'd best not be just cruising through here either - I'll be expecting to see lots of your smiling poetic face around here...  Big grins here...   |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JasonDaniels~ Welcome to Passions~  An insightful entrance~ Know you'll enjoy it here and hoping you'll share more with us~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wonderful cadence here...great story telling in rhyme.. welcome to Poetry Land...so nice to meet you. When your own emptiness is all that's getting through |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Great first poem! Enjoyed, and welcome to Passions.  smiles ~Marie~ |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
enjoyed and welcome! -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
'and the lies in the lives of those poor wretched souls who've been imprisoned since youth within the life they'd been sold' This line really struck me as being the most telling truth of the day. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Jason - well written, and enjoyed reading this... BC |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
There are stories within the stories of your words. You have one seeing what the eyes may have be blind to before. Magnificent writing. I too will welcome you to Passions, although I have not been in a while I can tell you it is the most loving poetry site on the net and you will be embraced by them all. Keep posting. Your work is unique and very beautiful. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Has the lost one returned? This wunnerful lil poetic community could only hope, eh?   Welcome, Jason! Now..on to the poetry. As usual this, in my opinion, has perfect flow. I always did like that you could do that so well. It will certainly be a treat reading your work whenever you get to come around here. Welcome home. You always did belong here too. Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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MissNTrope Junior Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 43 |
Indeed - Nice to see our original resident poets return, isn't it?  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Jason...welcome to Passions...I enjoyed this..very lyrical, and interesting poem. |
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Siofra
since 2000-09-28
Posts 551State of Suspended Passion |
Your work comes to me via recommendation, sir. So far, I am impressed. We do hope to be seeing you around here as often as you can. [This message has been edited by Siofra (edited 10-14-2001).] |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Welcome to Passions, Jason, and with a very good first post. I know you will enjoy your times here, for there are very wonderful people who will be reading and enjoying your words..gentle smile |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well done Jason! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful!!!! Charisma |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Hey I know you! *grins* Where ya been? How ya been? Fill me in! Good to see you, Mr. Silverthorne! Excellent write, I truly enjoyed the temporal flow. Glad to have you around again! -Pip You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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