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Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

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0 posted 2001-10-12 09:12 AM

                                  The Letter

                                  It came, edged in black, a missive,
                                  and for some time, it simply lay
                                  in her lap, quietly, a message of
                                  passing, a time of grief,

                                  the chore of opening it with the
                                  bone knife too burdensome, just yet,
                                  too terrible the knowledge it held,
                                  she was not ready to take it in to her
                                  heart, as she had taken him in,

                                  her fingers lay on the parchment,
                                  stroking the ink’s lines,
                                  falling to her velvet skirt,
                                  picking at memories
                                  now engulfed by great loss,
                                  drowned by inner tears
                                  the salt’s stinging clench
                                  strangling all sound.

                                  She would open the letter
                                  but not now.

[This message has been edited by Lady In White (edited 10-12-2001).]

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

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1 posted 2001-10-12 09:17 AM

Oh God, how I bled through these lines....

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"

"Others can stop you temporarily, but only you can do it permanently."

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

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Victoria, Australia

2 posted 2001-10-12 09:23 AM

Dear Lady in White, this is a very emotional read, one that brings pictures to the mind of grieving, of loss and the building of courage. The strength slowly growing as etchings of the written words, with power of mind consumption, consume. The letter seems to hold both memories of love and future tears of grieving. We all seem to rely on time to make things right and ease the hurt.

Great work, loved it.

Sincerely
Rick

Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 2001-10-12 09:24 AM

Wrenchingly beautiful
Exquisite writing
Liz

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2001-10-12 09:31 AM

Lady..Lady...
you MUST keep this one going...
this could only be part one........
we must have more ........

When your own emptiness is all that's getting through
There comes a point when you're not sure why you're still talking
I passed that point long ago

Logan
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since 2001-05-28

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5 posted 2001-10-12 09:44 AM

Ahhh, Lady, you weave a tale, so deftly, so grabbing..of course there has to be more..words like that cannot stop even if you wish them to..one of your best..very gentle smile

RMW
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6 posted 2001-10-12 11:01 AM

Wonderful rhythm and sounds.

wayoutwalt
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7 posted 2001-10-12 11:42 AM

its a good thing there is a sequel up yuh!

Auguste

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By the sea

8 posted 2001-10-12 12:17 PM

Nicely done...what came to my mind were the thousands of letters like this one that wives, fathers and mothers received during world war two...how hard that letter would've been to open, because opening it would've confirmed what the loved one had alread suspected all along. Anyway, this is how I perceived this piece.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

SEA

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with you

9 posted 2001-10-12 12:19 PM

oh....
this is amazing

Martie

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10 posted 2001-10-12 06:08 PM

Lady--a beginning to something more..wonderfully done!

Auguste

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By the sea

11 posted 2001-10-13 03:42 AM

Bump

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Midnitesun

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Gaia

12 posted 2001-10-13 03:49 AM

Thanks to Michael's 'bump', I read this one that I had previously missed. How sad, yet there is a sense of acceptance that there will be more steps for her to take, if only in memory.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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13 posted 2001-10-14 01:10 AM

up it goes.

The Lady of Shallot
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14 posted 2001-10-14 08:33 PM

thank you !!!!!!!!!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2001-10-15 12:03 PM

Excellent write, this one from you, O Lady in White...

Regards,
Sudhir

Nan

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16 posted 2001-10-15 12:12 PM

I'm so glad I found these all together - just getting to them now... This is the beginning of a heartwrenching story, Lady..

Interloper

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Deep in the heart

17 posted 2001-10-15 06:42 PM

Just a perfect depiction of how any mother or wife would feel when getting such a letter from, for example, the Department of Defense. Or, during WWII, the War Department.

Just a beautifully written piece

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

LngJhnAg
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18 posted 2001-10-16 01:10 PM

Ah - the introduction to a tale of grief, and perhaps release? I like the flow and development.

suthern

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19 posted 2001-10-16 03:10 PM

Knowing... but unwilling to confirm what is known... This is exceptional, Lady... very touching.

Startime
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20 posted 2001-10-16 03:13 PM

Painfully beautiful. She sits with her bittersweet memories while tears fill her eyes. *sigh* what an incredible poem.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

21 posted 2001-10-16 03:21 PM

Excellent....moving on to the second.

Magnus

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22 posted 2001-10-16 03:48 PM

Wow, this is a very beautiful but sad
poem.....I must commend you on the words that
you have written so well.

rwood
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Tennessee

23 posted 2001-10-18 06:48 PM

Back up this goes....The season of series! I am enveloped with intrigue and will follow your letter..slow I am..but I will go back.. for your every word is worth it. Bravo!

Sincerely,
Regina

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