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The Lady of Shallot
Senior Member

since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

0 posted 2001-10-04 06:11 PM

I found a portal to unconsciousness in joy
a frame around all that is praised and unveiled.
Yet no image to my words can serve expression
for in loving you, I imminently failed.

From rapture fell a scorn of incapacity,
in breath and distance, wander now I must.
My purpose lent and passion poured is haunting.
I bind and ground unwillingness to dust.

How utterly I strip these damning lines
to shed the foretaste left from bittersweet!
Oh, let me pass, ungenerous spirit free-
give sound to voiceless rage on winds complete.

My weeping fresh, I grieve your death, in pain!
I write a shallow sweetness for release!
And though the phoenix burns ‘fore resurrection
One fortnight, soon, I know she will increase.

For when you were my own, my love, you came
to clear a threshold to my heart and soul!
Now take my pulse to beat against thy own
inflowing to myself and breathe me whole!

You loved me with lasciviousness and purity,
now save me from myself, restore my dignity.

sunshinemist
Senior Member

since 2001-09-29

Posts 595
Fl. sunshines early mist

1 posted 2001-10-04 06:18 PM

Lady,

Very beautifully said. I enjoyed this very much! Thank you.

Warm smiles,
Marie

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2001-10-04 06:49 PM

Welcome Lady! You've got quite a flair here. Sorry I've been remiss in welcoming you, I have been trying to play catch up for awhile, but please know I appreciate your reading and I am enjoying your work as well.
I look forward to more!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2001-10-04 07:06 PM

You loved me with lasciviousness and purity,
now save me from myself, restore my dignity.
Very beautiful....enjoyed dear Lady. ~Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Daniel J D
Senior Member

since 2000-10-01

Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia

4 posted 2001-10-04 07:43 PM

A fine poem, well done.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2001-10-04 07:56 PM

This is the second I have read of yours, and it is spectacular, as was the first. Flawless style.
Sandra

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

6 posted 2001-10-04 08:29 PM

We are our own worst enemy. A very pleading and beautiful write. Line after line! Enjoyed so much. Thank you.

Sincerely,
Regina

The Lady of Shallot
Senior Member

since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

7 posted 2001-10-04 09:15 PM

Thank you for reading, I'm not at my best right now,
but I will try from time to time to offer something. I appreciate your words. I really do.

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-04-2001).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2001-10-05 12:58 PM

My weeping fresh, I grieve your death, in pain!
I write a shallow sweetness for release!
And though the phoenix burns ‘fore resurrection
One fortnight, soon, I know she will increase.

For when you were my own, my love, you came
to clear a threshold to my heart and soul!
Now take my pulse to beat against thy own
inflowing to myself and breathe me whole!

You loved me with lasciviousness and purity,
now save me from myself, restore my dignity.

========================

this is fabulous writing...outstanding and impressive.
the cadence, the vocabulary, the classic poetic phrasing and language and the empassioned aching conflict of the emote.
very very well done Lady S.

We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide ... if we just find the right words to say.

Twilight Myst
Member

since 2001-10-04

Posts 58
Just A Myst At Twilight

9 posted 2001-10-05 01:02 AM

For when you were my own, my love, you came
to clear a threshold to my heart and soul!
Now take my pulse to beat against thy own
inflowing to myself and breathe me whole!
~~~~~~~~~

This is fantastic!!

::softly claps:: Bravo!!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

10 posted 2001-10-05 07:28 AM

very deep and quite beautiful..I am enjoying your style of writing, it is captivating

thank you

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

The Lady of Shallot
Senior Member

since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

11 posted 2001-10-18 06:42 PM

thank you ALL for your kind words!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-
Anna

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