Teen Poetry #5 |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
This is part 1 of a 3 part collection I am writing as part of a christmas gift. The collection as a whole will be "Past, Present, Future", but I will post it piece by piece as I get it done. This is my first time with this format, hope you like it! Thanks for readin. Past A word, a kiss, a single touch That flares a soul inside, A sound, a taste, a single breath The force of love provide. A gaze so soft ensures my heart Of love’s protective song, A gentle sway of rhythm’s voice Flows melody along. A fragile touch, a soft caress To ease the mortal hold, A quiet murmur, gentle truth Reveals a verse untold. A tender kiss of tranquil bliss Calms the cold uprising, A hushed call, a gentle trace Of our love devising. A soft reflection in your eyes Glistens toward the night, A solid promise, guaranteed Through this eternal plight. A past of thankful memories Such sweet recollections, I am so grateful, my Dear Love For these sweet reflections. ~Alicia Morris 12-22-01 Thank you, Allan, For your Help! [This message has been edited by AngelPoet87 (12-22-2001 11:58 AM).] |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Your first time in this format? You're a natural then! This is one of the best poems I've read, better then most I've written. I like how you kept the stanzas short and sweet. All in all, a very good peice. Can't wait to read the rest! Don't Drink and Park! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
It's very rare that I read a poem that flows this well, yet alone one that flows and is beautiful!! You've hit both of those with this piece; great job!! ![]() ![]() *~Fighting for your love~* |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Thanks a bunch, its something I'm working on! |
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[Ice Box] Junior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 21Canada |
AngelPoet87 ![]() You have a very nice flow running throughout your piece! The wording was well done, and fitted nicely within the format. I don't have much to say about this, partly due to the fact that sleep eludes me every night, so I can't think [Ice Box] Bitter. |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Very nice Ali. Can't wait for the other two. -Adam |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Wow.. very nice I really like it keep up the awsome work. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
Nice...very nice. i'd hafta agree tho..if this is the 1st time you used this format..then ya got skills...LoL..nice work " How can i feel if i can't breathe...?" |
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