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Muted Muse/Hard To Hold
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Muted Muse/Hard To Hold |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Need to write, a plea to astound. (need to purge) Say something, (anything) profound. My pen is silent no muse to be found. Alone and lonely, and silence ... makes a lonesome sound. You always leave when I need you the most. Slipping into the shadows, incantated poetic ghost. Words and images dance in my head. But they remain locked away, silenced instead. Oh muse of mine-- do you even miss me? You tempt and tease, deceive and dismiss me. You leave me feeling muted, confused and tired. Worst of all-- so damned cliche'd and uninspired. You take my rhymes, turn them into ash and dust. Cast my verse into curse, burn all my desires into lust. Leaving me desperate, ready to sell my soul in trade. Dance with the devil, break all my promises made. Without you ... I've lost my way, Without you ... I've no words to say. I need you here ... but your gone to stay. On bended knee I now plead and pray. Oh muse of mine ... be my morns golden ray. Return my words ... by merciful light of day. Janet Marie ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ Hard To Hold All I ever wanted was to love you ... all I ever needed ... I found in you. I gave you my heart and soul ... God, it was just so easy to do. I whispered in your sorrow's silence ... I shared all my secrets untold. All I ever wanted was to hold you ... but baby you're hard to hold. Tell me what you want from me ... tell me what I'm supposed to do. I've cried a thousand tears ... and I lived and died inside of you. I always thought we were forever ... that together we'd gracefully grow old. All I ever wanted was to hold you ... but baby, sometimes you're hard to hold. How many love songs can I sing for you ... how many poems do I need to write. How many times do we have to try ... before we finally get it right. To you I would give all my falling stars ... the moon so blue, the sun of gold. All I ever wanted was to hold you ... but baby you're so hard to hold. Now your gone again ... and I'm left alone with this pain. I'm becoming lost in this silence ... and I'm screaming out your name. Once warmed by your light ... now I'm left in the dark so cold. All I ever wanted was to hold you ... but baby you're so damn hard to hold. All I ever wanted was to hold you ... but baby you're just so hard to hold. Still I'll die trying ... I'm gonna love ya till I'm old. Janet Marie *(Hard To Hold is a repost from 9) oh you speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes my body aches to breathe your breath your words keep me alive ~Sarah McLachlan~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-22-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
here I come and take a peek about a muse long gone a week but no, for you forever tweak a poem from your fine pen |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sweetie, haven't I told you, you are awesome with or without that fickle muse of yours?  You are so darn good, you make her jealous!  love the repost SEA |
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Isabella Junior Member
since 2001-03-22
Posts 16Confusion |
This is terrific! Isabella |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I enjoyed both poems, but especially related to "Muted Muse." Hun, your pen will never dry out, nor will your muse ever hide, you're far too talented for that to happen If only I could write like you, your muse is magic!Take care, Melissa~ |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I've always thought Hard to Hold would be a good song. Now Muted Muse kinda has a musical quality too. Always good poetry from that muse, whether she's there or MIA. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Seems your Muted Muse has been Hard to Hold but it hasn't stopped you from writing what is in your soul. I enjoyed both poems but hate to see someone in pain. Sometimes we just need to find another Muse. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
If you ever need to find that muse JM ... Balladeer and I have a map to MuseLand, LOL! Fickle things they are, running off when we least desire. It sure appears you've found a lovely substitue though Janet Marie ... both poems have such a beautiful lyrical quality about them, very nice my friend, very lovely indeed! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--I don't think you need a muse, just look, I mean, I'm so confused, here you say can't right a thing but in my ear I hear you ring. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"You always leave when I need you the most. Slipping into the shadows, incantated poetic ghost." -- ah, how very true of our muses....I especially loved "incantated poetic ghost"...what a perfect image! And Hard To Hold was an added bonus to this post! Thank you for sharing both of these spectacular pieces, my friend.  *Krista Knutson* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks all for indulging me ever moody muse ... Sun ... LOL at a "week long gone" ... actually I wrote this back at the first of the year when I was in a dry spell, I never posted it as I dont really care for it...but I noticed so many of us of late have been doing reposts and lots of talk about missing muses... so I thought it was a good time to do some spring cleaning and post it. thank you for the clever poetic reply Sea ... you're so biased that your adorable me thanks ya...and so does me fickle muse. This is definately not one of my best..but then thats the point when our muses are on leave. Hard to Hold is an old fav and I thought it went well with this new one...and me muse is HTH too. Isabella .. thank you for the terrific and Welcome to Passions. Melis .. thank you sweets for such a great reply ... but your muse is every bit as gifted and even better...uniquely YOU PK ... thank you kindly poet sir ... from me and me moody missing muse sometimes I'm not sure if she's MIA ..or AWOL *L* inot2B .. thank you for the clever wordplay reply ... and Im not in as much pain as the poems may read....chalk some of it up to poetic license, but everyone always says my writings seem sad ... gotta blame it on "me moody muse" Kit ... me thinks me muse stole the map and headed for the beach LOL ... thank you for hearing the melody in this...now I'll try for harmony with me muse thanks sweet poetess. Martie ... that ringing is from me trying to sing LOL ... thank you sweets..for the poetic reply ... sometimes I get so frustrated with me muse...when I see so many proficient poets who write 3-4 a day( we wont mention any names)..... (Sunshine, Doreen, Serenity) ...(hey who said that) *L* I used to write that often with ease...now Im lucky for one a week..for what ever reasons...(moth poet )  *L*but I am ALWAYS grateful for what ever me muse gives me thanks all and I guess writers block and moody muses is all part of being a poet... we dont have to like it.. just learn to respect it oh you speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes my body aches to breathe your breath your words keep me alive ~Sarah McLachlan~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-22-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Krista...hey cutie poet.. ya slipped in while I was doing my peck-peck left hand typing thank you sweet poet and Im so glad you enjoyed these ... hopefully not relating...just enjoying hey..I love your sig...TRACY RULES!!! "and you can say baby.... baby can I hold you tonite" Tracy is a groovy girlie oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
JM, I found you quite by accident. When was #13 added? Anyway, I liked both poems and I don't think I ever had a "muse". I will look again! Hugs, ME |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Mercy me, if your muse is lost...I sincerely hope I find her, and she will stay with me a while, these were wonderful Janet Marie. |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Well, I know all about lost muses. It sure doesn't seem as if yours is lost, LOL! You've done a wonderful, crafty job with this! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
oooooopppps!  [This message has been edited by Dee (edited 03-23-2001).] |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Janet, the imagery of your words is amazing. Iloved both poems. I guess been there done that with both of them. Loved this bit ----------------------- Now your gone again ... and I'm left alone with this pain. I'm becoming lost in this silence ... and I'm screaming out your name. Once warmed by your light ... now I'm left in the dark so cold. ------------------------ Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
I think I enjoy your poetry most Janet because so many times as I read it I'm captured by excellent lines that leave me in awe! I enjoyed both of these. "When people show you who they are, believe them" |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
lol, hey jm, maybe our muses went for that drink and decided to stay......lol...mine I think has a definate hangover...my head hurts when I try to write really nice work lady |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I agree---you've got the best missing muse I've ever read! But I do understand, sometimes my writing annoys ME---and then my not writing annoys me...and then I'm just A NOID!  Keep up the not writing technique, Jan--IT'S WORKING! ...e ya later...need some more info from you! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Well Randy went to find your muse Took along a bottle of booze. Left a note of which I quote "I'll be back on the next slow boat." I guess that say's it all. Wonderful poem, loved it. Winkiewinkie Stinky |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
oh that muse, you write just fine without it tho Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, maybe the muse leave to give you a chance to get out and be bad. you know just to get those inspirational juices flowing. Parker |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Oooooooooo Sweets....The new one rocks...and you know I already have a place in my heart for the other..your poetry comes from so deep....Poetry is one thing you definately can't fake baby...unlike other things  ..."that's what I'm sayin"...yayayayayaYou weave it like no other butterfly... Love you girlie!! |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
"can't someone put a frickin bell on him or something" you lose yours more than I lose MINE! "gone to stay" good "cliche' play" i love it when a coined phrase gets a new turn. "while she reads and replies and chews on her pen i absolutely love her when she writes" anyone rememebr that one? hmm... prolly not. You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass. - Frank Sinatra "It don't mean a thing if it ain't got that swing." [This message has been edited by Ethan Halo (edited 03-23-2001).] |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'You leave me feeling muted, confused and tired. Worst of all-- so damned cliche'd and uninspired. You take my rhymes, turn them into ash and dust. Cast my verse into curse, burn all my desires into lust.' ================================= 'All I ever wanted was to love you ... all I ever needed ... I found in you. I gave you my heart and soul ... God, it was just so easy to do. I whispered in your sorrow's silence ... I shared all my secrets untold. All I ever wanted was to hold you ... but baby you're hard to hold.' Hey, JM...I know...I'm a bit late, but I made it!! OK...excellent writes, of course! But, especially the 'whispered in your sorrow's silence...' Stood out to me, for some reason...did I mention that you're fantastic at this???  Love this, m'friend!!sp  to be with you... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Im having server problems today..and keep getting kicked... so after several attempts to reply to each .. I give up for now... and will say THANK YOU TO ALL for the wonderful encouraging replies and compliments that you are always so sweet to share with me... each one is heartfelt....... and Ethan... YES .. I REMEMBER my respect and love to all in poetry land. thanks for indulging my ever infamous moody muse >oh you speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes my body aches to breathe your breath your words keep me alive ~Sarah McLachlan~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-24-2001).] |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Two very good discriptions on the imperfections total love embraces |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
These two are a unbeatable combo. You know how much I adore Hard to Hold. I am so glad you have returned to the scene of the crime here. You didn't think you were coming back without me did ya!  Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JM: I'd read this and loved it... but tried to be good and wait to reply until I got to it in my backwards reading plan. *S* But then, I think you shared your server problems! LOL For just as I started to reply, our system crashed... so badly we actually got to leave a half hour early after an afternoon completely lacking productivity. *S* Now... what was it I was gonna say? LOL damned cliche'd and uninspired? You???? Never, sweet lady. And fortunately for us, your moody muse is never gone to stay, however much she might tease and torment you by not being ever at your beck and call. *G* "All I ever wanted was to hold you ... but baby you're just so hard to hold. Still I'll die trying ... I'm gonna love ya till I'm old." I love the entire poem, but these lines so well define loving the elusive... it's something we do, whether successful or not. *S* Wonderful work, dear poet!!!! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
You always leave when I need you the most. Slipping into the shadows, incantated poetic ghost. Words and images dance in my head. But they remain locked away, silenced instead.... I sure know somebody like this... Your muse is working pretty good on bended Knee here. Ok.... I won't go there. but i'll think about it. Parker |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
hear hear... for she is not lost... which character is she looking for??? For after reading page 1 of JM - she headed straight for icq - awaiting for him, as he waited for her. knock, knock - LP He is my pen, I am but the paper he |
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