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his favorite bunny |
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ljossberir Member
since 2003-05-04
Posts 81Ny, USA 
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His Favorite Bunny Matt Keach One day I saw a dead bunny, hopeless on the ground The pound it made when pavement hit had long since dispensed the sound I also saw the strangest thing I ever saw take place A boy of nine picked it up and wiped dirt tracks from its face "I never had a pet" he sighed with tears so thick He wrapped the rabit up and placed him in his new coat The rain poured down persistently but the boy promised to keep him safe "I never knew you when you were alive" he sighed "..but I'll love you dead as I would if you were alive because the only difference is time." |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This was definatley unique. Thanks for the read. Marilyn. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
"..but I'll love you dead as I would if you were alive because the only difference is time." I love those lines!! I think it would be much stronger and flow better if you wrote it like this tho-> "..but I'll love you dead as I would you alive because the only difference is time." But loved it like it was!!   ELMO "No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!" |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
In about two and a half years membership, I've never read something quite like this in piptalk before. Let me congratulate you first on an extremely original approach to a very interesting concept. Now, the meaning you're trying to communicate, I'm having a little bit of trouble understanding precisely what it is. The only difference between life and death is time? Is this about veneration of the dead? That we should remember and care for life even when it's already gone? I notice you say the boy promises to keep him safe, and love him, even though he's dead. The only difference is time, you say... Now I'm starting to think this isn't a positive message at all, but something to do with the futility of life, that caring for the living is no different than caring for the dead because eventually everything turns to death... the boy realizes this when he sees the rabbit and decides that having something to care for, "having a pet," is more important to the one who cares than it is to the one who is cared for... because caring for something does nothing to protect it from the prospect of death, everything it does is in the favour of the one giving... Hmm... you've really made me think. Thank you for this... I'm putting it in my private library. Very well done. Parasite Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world. |
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ljossberir Member
since 2003-05-04
Posts 81Ny, USA |
it's sort of about the boy, who never had anything to cling to, family abandoned him, and he wanted a friend. The bunny was the only option for this, and just looking at it made him love how innocent & cute it was, and how good of a friend it would have been... and I started thinking.. what's really different about this bunny? death? No, we all die. Time! It's wide open for interpretation but I did want to make a contrast between the darkness of the boys life and the beauty and brightness of his pet, even when it was dead. I guess overall it's neither positive or negative... but, in the end its about the fact that the boy loves his pet anyway, he loves him so much that his love transcends death |
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