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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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for my father..i wanted to visit him last nite..to talk..to hear what he had to say..to see his smile..but he couldnt hear me..he couldnt speak to me....my visit took place in a cemetary--his home now..on a cold, wet, dec night..amongst dead people..where i stamped my feet..and screamed..and whispered when i had no voice..and he's been there since i was 16..and it still rains sometimes.... ---------------------------------------------------- it still rains sometimes i peek inside and find a shattered rain cloud or two diamonds falling splashing the face of anguish i still need you sometimes now more than ever i came to talk to you but i cried instead i shook from the cold and the storm inside it still rains sometimes but the parade marches on as scheduled just the same 12-16-00 |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Welcome to Passions. This is a very touching piece. Keep talking to your Dad, he still hears you. Know in your heart he will always be with you no matter where you are. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! Check your e-mail for a special greeting! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Know this...you have written a soft and sincere poem...James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
FallenRain~ A softly spoken piece of anguish from your heart. When the rain falls on our memories, it's often hard to hear the sounds of voices of our past. I offer an umbrella of friendship that you will find comforting here among the friends at Passions In Poetry. Keep writing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Hey Fallen Rain, welcome to Passions. This piece I found very touching and painful. Beautiful work...hope to see more. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
fallen rain, this was a wonderful piece. I lost my father when I was 4. I needed him many times in life, today I get what I can from the stories of his life and the pictures that still exist. Maybe I was blessed to not have known my father as well as you got to know yours in 16 years... but I believe not. Carry those 16 years with you and when you need them and him maybe you'll find something their to help or draw on. Parker |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome!  I felt every word.....this is very touching......-SEA |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
inot2b..i thank you..i do keep him in my heart.. i dont believe he hears me--i believe the dead are dead..for now..however, i talk, all the same... sunshine..thank you james..thats very sweet of you ..thank you marge..such truth you speak..it is sometimes difficult to hear their voices when the rain comes...sometimes hard to see their faces thru the rainstorm...thank you for the umbrella... elizabeth..thank you for beautiful sea..thank you very much parker..i especially thank you..for those were words i needed to hear..certain things dont become apparent until someone else says them...and you see, i knew that story..about you losing your father..but i didnt know it quite the way you left it here.. i didnt intend to be quite so anonymous in posting under this name..the name just fit the poem..and perhaps will fit some others in the future.. my actual name was supposed to be in the copyright line..but i see it didnt show up there..its me..dgvarner but a warm welcome was a good feeling right about now..thank you for being such a wonderful, accepting 'family' ...hugs, gale |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
The soul is the essence of thought. and thought is proven to be a form of energy. In science it is proven that energy can not be destroyed only changed. When we die our energy only changes form it goes on forever. He hears you. If you think of him he lives on. Well written poem. |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
The soul is the essence of thought. and thought is proven to be a form of energy. In science it is proven that energy can not be destroyed only changed. When we die our energy only changes form it goes on forever. He hears you. If you think of him he lives on. Well written poem. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee love, Oh love, what can I say, except sometimes it feels as if the whole world is coming down around your ears. My Daddy died when I was 5, well I wasn't actually quite five. My birthday being in Jan, it was Christmas day, but only just. He worked in London, and was coming home on Christmas Eve, and at 12:01 am a drunk driver lost control of their car and crashed headfirst into Dads car coming on the other side of the road. Then there was no more Daddy. But I know there is life after death, I've even seen him a couple of times. Like when I really needed to, and everyone needs to sometimes. Anyway this was an absolutely amazing piece from you, it really is. So utterly descriptive, so poignant, and so heartfelt. Love this one Dee, I really do, another ace piece. Take care Bubbles Love it excellant work  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Welcome to passions, you made a grand entrance with this touching piece. Beautiful and bittersweet are just two of the many words that come to mind when describing this poem. I find, that it's often the personal poems that touch other poet's hearts the deepest and you touched mine, it made me think of my Grandma. I'm sincerely sorry for your loss, but know that he is watching you and is very proud of your talent as a poet. I'm sure that those "diamonds falling" from the sky are your daddy's tears of joy. Keep sharing your poems with us! ~Melissa~ The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
You little sneak....lol. you should be spanked, and I'm just the one to do it... Parker |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well my friend, this one really got to me and whether the dead are dead or not doesn't diminish the wonderful memories that you hold within you and in my belief that is how the dead will forever live. Through the hearts and memories of those that still remain here among the living. Beautiful and heartfelt piece from you. Now watch out for that other cowboy coming to give you that spanking. That is unless of course you don't want to hide. Hugs to you and I hope that the storm in your heart finds a little peace through your release here with this wonderful verse of yours. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome to passions....very heartmoving touch in your words. you expressed your feelings very well ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
john r..i thank you for your reply and i do think of him..so he does live on in my heart bubbles..as always, your praise is unlike any other sometimes i think i hear my daddys voice in a crowd..sometimes i catch a glimpse of someone and have to take a second look, as i thought i saw him..we all have differing beliefs..and i've stated mine..but sometimes i like to pretend..or..dream my daddy died just after the new yr came in..so..the new yr didnt hold much for me for quite some time..melissa..thank you for your very sweet reply..i know we all have shared something similar at one time or another..like you, i find the more personal ones most touching to me also.. aw parker....lol i'm not so bad am i?? my daddy'd get a kick outta you...amen cowboy mark.......... thank you..yeah..i dont think i'll hide from love puppy..(dont tell him i sd so..but i think hes harmles...teehee) charisma..thank you and for the hug too  hugs, fallen.. "the beginning of wisdom is, 'i do not know'" -unknown |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Fallen Rain..... Let me start by welcoming you to Passions. You'll find that you'll be able to vent, scream, cry and laugh here, and find many caring friends along the way. Your piece touched me in a way that reminded me..... never let a day go by with out saying "I love you" I couldn't imagine the pain of loosing my Dad or my Mom. You have written a wonderful piece that expresses your feelings quite well..... < !signature--> ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" [This message has been edited by Irie (edited 12-17-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Welcome to passions!!! I see that you've already gotten a butt warming welcome from parker! This is a moving piece here...intensely sad and profound. I look forward to reading more from you. Love your name too. (so much more poetic than "puddles" *wink*) Again, welcome. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Fallen Rain, please know that your Dad does hear you Your poem, you have written beautifully, I could see it all and it touched me deeply.Welcome to Passions! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Fallen Rain, This is a heartfelt and beautiful piece penned straight from your heart. I felt your pain and anguish deeply. From someone who knows I can only say this. I lost my Mom when I was just barely 17. I do believe she hears me and is with me just as I believe your Dad is with you. Never give up on that thought. I know it is hard sometimes as we can not see them nor hear them, bt I do believe they see and hear us. I look foward to reading more of your work. Take care. ~amy ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
irie..i live by those very same words--never let a day go by without telling those you love, that you love them there were so many things left unsaid, questions i didnt get to ask, time i didnt get to spend..when i lost my dad, the realization set in that you just never know about tomorrow.. thank you for your reply serenity..what--you dont think 'puddles' wouldve been good?? whew! and i started to use that name too...LOL j/k..  i look forward to you reading more of my work too..and you can also find me under 'dgvarner' (as stated above... sorry bout the unintended anonimity) ps..gotta love those butt warming parker welcomes...teehee... maree..thanks for feeling it with me ...aimster..thank you so much for your reply please do read more of me hugs, fallen |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
DgV, You've touched my heart with this one, I too miss my father who passed away 15 years ago, and I talk to him sometimes. We are seperated in the physical world but we are very much still connected in spirit! Thoughtful look at loss and grief! Dennis :^) P.S. Fallen Rain, allow me to add my WELCOME, you are always welcome! Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I loved the imagery of the diamonds..beautiful work! Nathan |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
W*E*L*C*O*M*E TO PASSIONS! This was such a beautiful write... enjoyed! -Tier |
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Ramses Junior Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 40Porsgrunn, Telemark, Norway |
Fallen rain... Welcome to passions...I too am new here, but I`ve come to love this place and so will you hopefully Lovely poem, so sad when the ones you need just isn`t there anymore... Keep sharing -Ramses- |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
buddy DEN..i knew you'd come see me, if i just told you where to find me i thank you for stopping in and leaving your mark and of course..thank you for the welcome NATE DOGGY DOG..thank you much my friend TIER..glad you enjoyed reading thanks RAMSES..it was a very sad moment for me..it comes and goes..mostly you just have to keep life moving..but this was a nite of 'stop' and feel the silence..and it was very silent..... thanks for reading.. hugs, fallen "the beginning of wisdom is, 'i do not know'" -unknown |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I know how you feel Dee..my dad's birthday will be in two days and he passed only 3 years ago..starting off my writing addiction..this one reminds me of your visit to the cemetary...huggzzz ~Wynter Needing You Visited today... climbed the rolling green hill. Words prepared, when reaching you, were gone. Weakly, gliding shaking hand over strong gray marble, warmed by the sun's heat familiar names on either side, brought to mind happier times. Surrounded by ocean blue skies huge clouds floating above wondering... Can you see my tears? Can you share my pain? Can you hear my thoughts? Lifting my head, through damp eyes, noticed a tiny shell resting on another's edge. Examined the spiral within a spiral, once a life within a life... left behind in memory of someone "special". I have nothing to leave this time only sorrowful news and eternal love. Leaning, my body against for support now peacefulness entered my soul, stilled my shaking arresting my thoughts hoping the winds of today will dry my tears, becoming the soft breezes of my tomorrows. My kissed fingers touched your etchings saying goodbye, before walking the paths of others, reaching out to touch their warmth in passing hoping they too, can feel mine knowing a part of my heart remains for all to share in eternal peace. M 9*2k "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dg, i liked your new name well honestly im not very close to my parents..your post was a timely reminder that i should show my appreciation in more obvious ways...i certainly dont want to have unasked questions too... i share your sorrow and ask that you wish me luck in averting mine... |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Fallen Rain, This was very beautifully sad, I too understand because I lost both parents when I was young and ended up with someone that did not deserve kids and it has taken my whole life to understand them, I always wonder what life would of been like and if I would of been happy. Bitter sweet the rain can be because some times when the rain pours there comes understanding at least for me, I wish you the very best, this is very wonderful work and I want to welcome you to passions, I look forword to more, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wynter..thank you for sharing your poem..thats a very nice write for your dad its a tough visit..i know..but its one that has to be made that way at times.. you learn to accept the new residence..but sometimes, the unavailability is the hardest part to accept.. kaile..i certainly wish you much luck in averting the sorrow..i've learned not to wait too long to say 'i love you'... cerenity..thank you for sharing your story..i can imagine it must be hard for you--the wondering.. thank you for the welcome.. hugs, g |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
g, beautifully done... haunting, aching with your loss... but still shining through the rain is the love you feel for your father. I haven't spoken with my father for nine years; I'm not sure if he is still alive. Your poem is a reminder that there is still time for me to make amends because, like you, there are so many people who don't get to fully know a parents's love when they are taken away too soon. Well written; keep talking to your father... he hears you and one day you will get to talk to him in person again  ) Hugs - Jeff |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
I relate to your very well expressed poem very much. It is very emotive and heartfelt. I pray that talking to your dad comforts you as much as talking to mine comforts me at times. warm huggs and extra ones over the holidays!aloha! Koko Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey DgV... You know something..my Dad hasn't died, but I am not really in contact with him. If ever we talk there is awkwardness and a knowledge he doesn't love me. It's christmas now and I really miss him...or more I miss not having a Dad. I am so sorry for your loss, and the continued grief - I'm sure it's really hard to be in that place. In some way, some measure I understand. I think, if you look inside for your memories he will be there. Those memories of love you are so lucky to have hon. Hugs K |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey there fallen rain so good to have you here at Passions...this is without a doubt a tender and heartfelt tribute to such an important figure in your life and the metaphorical poet's approach gives you the chance to do him so proud......I'll be looking for your passions ....take care.... ethome |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome to Passions. I have been here....standing alone in a cold cemetery, looking down at my parent's graves and crying, feeling so alone, knowing I can't see them. Then I look around to see if anyone is watching and I cry some more, then I look up....and I somehow, see them. It makes all the difference. "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
fallen rain a wonderful entry piece into our lil home. -enjoyed yuh |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
It still rains sometimes, so sad, yet I know your dad must hear your cries. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
fallen rain~ Beautiful read, you still miss him very much indeed...I'm sorry The pain lessons but never leaves ~HUG~ Tracie~ Warm welcome to passions, hope you enjoy it here Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hey everybody..my computer's caught a virus and fritzed out on me..no longer usable  so i must leave you with a big thank you..as i'll only be here sporatically for a little while..til i get a different computer i do thank all of you for your replies, very much!! hugs, fallen "the beginning of wisdom is, 'i do not know'" -unknown |
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