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Livingroom Stream---Sunshine's challenge
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Livingroom Stream---Sunshine's challenge |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Livingroom Stream I awake with visions of sleep in my eye Skylite above my bed I enjoy the 5 am sky Cotton-candy clouds playing hide and seek As I see Luna smiling, giving me a little peek To the kitchen to start up a pot of columbian brew Glancing out bay windows to see what my garden grew Petals of roses still somber in scented hugs of essence Hibiscus starting to stretch color sensing my presence Off to the enclosure of glass and gold plated chrome Cascading warmth pouring over me welcoming me home Marbled basins to hold mirrored reminders of coming age Scented plumes in ceramic surrounded by pot pourri's of sage Hot cup of coffee and a window bench to the world outside Picturesque views of my Koi pond giving me so much pride Enhanced with colors in my garden of rainbows and green Pondering dewdrops on grass wondering what does it mean Crimson and gold kissing orange against horizons so blue Blinds pulled up from floor to ceiling frames of clear view Prisms of color sliding across tiles of european styled class As the sun pierces the depths of my nauticalistic stained glass A wink from me with knowledge of what this day will now hold As I pass from room to room on carpets warm and tiles of cold Visiting last the pride of this poets eyes lost in his eternal dream As I down breakfast under the oak next to my living room stream Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Mark What can I say! A well-written verse. About the only thing though is the lack of space for those in need. Daniel J D |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Daniel- Always space for a poet in 3800 sq. ft sitting on a ranch.....Thank you!!!! [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sounds like a lovely life--and you described it with such reverence...a lucky man it is, to know, when he is lucky...*wink* hug ya cowboy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
serenity-Thank you so much and it is "MY" dream house that I hope to share oneday with a beautiful butterfly of sorts. Blessed I believe more than lucky but either way....feels good to feel it. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mark such imagery, I could see, feel and smell it all...well done  Great poem Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
thank you mark that we may join you in your morninglife. I noticed that you have koi pond too.... and I know the feelings to be proud with having them. and I can taste the coffee...and see how you are enjoying the garden, and your life. loved it, and as always I enjoyed reading it. Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
only a cowboy would have stream running thru his living room ... and the waterfall??..the bedroom right??  Well this challenge had your name wrote all over it.. what a perfect vehicle to showcase your expceptional gift of imagery and detail. and you really show it in this one ... "To the kitchen to start up a pot of columbian brew Glancing out bay windows to see what my garden grew Petals of roses still somber in scented hugs of essence Hibiscus starting to stretch color sensing my presence Off to the enclosure of glass and gold plated chrome Cascading warmth pouring over me welcoming me home Marbled basins to hold mirrored reminders of coming age Scented plumes in ceramic surrounded by pot pourri's of sage =========================== Crimson and gold kissing orange against horizons so blue Blinds pulled up from floor to ceiling frames of clear view Prisms of color sliding across tiles of european styled class As the sun pierces the depths of my nauticalistic stained glass" =========================== awesome MC...awesome so your muse cut ya break huh? yea..I KNOW baby....I KNOW ... so....what kind of atmosphere does the truck get? ... I mean... a chevy is like a cowboys horse ... can just put em away wet in a garage *winkiewinkie* later-my-master-of-imagery-gator love ya me |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Beautiful weaving Mark, sounds like a dreamland...what a beautiful view to wake up to! No one does imagery like you do~ Now where to plant the orange trees... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ This whole piece is just lovely. If I HAD to pick a line or two - 'Petals of roses still somber in scented hugs of essence Hibiscus starting to stretch color sensing my presence' Beautiful, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This was so original and full of images, who writes about their surroundings except for nature, sometimes. I loved it! Kathleen |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Mark, Your palette must be overflowing in color...vivid artistry, very much enjoyed. Robert Joseph |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, here was a simple challenge, but look who ropes the calf in 2.1 ... and takes away the gold... challenge well met, and exceeded... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
AH Mark...this is so very you...lovely write |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I know what im getting you for Christmas..a pair of fuzzy slippers Mark haa...a beautiful..beautiful poem..wish i looked as beautiful sitting here with my hair a mess and my slippers on haa...  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Mark--This is a beautiful dream...and to have surroundings of such beauty would sure be nice...Your imagery is fanstastic...I was sitting there with you having coffee...thanks for inviting me over. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend well isn't this a beauty, pure gold. Absolutely a feast for the eyes, but don't ask me to do more than gaze at the beauty. It seems utterly impossible for me to be within ten feet of any plant without it keeling over. Still I can enjoy the view from here with your amazing skills, and am I glad, the roses are probably breathing a sigh of relief as well!! Take care, and you do know I love this don't you, I thought you did! Marsha  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Traci-I am glad that I was able to stimulate some of your senses. Thank you. Charisma-Thank you and yes I do have a Koi pond with a waterfall and it is a very comforting place to reside to especially with the garden surrounding it. JM-And you expect me to reply to that without getting into trouble??? Yeah right!!!!ROFL okay so you know that the waterfall is in the bedroom...care to tell the folks how YOU now that???????ROFLLLLLLL and HECK ya a stream why not?? Thank you my sweet friend. Holly-I could use some help with the location of the orange trees. Care to help???? I will have a cup of coffee waiting for you along with a cowboy breakfast!!! Thank you much.Marge-Thank you and I myself like those two lines as well. Hugs to you sweet friend. Kathleen-Thank you so much and what better to write about than nature...well, maybe love but it is all one and the same is it not? Robert-yes, it does at times and I just scoop up what I can. Thank you much Karilea-You made it easy to write what I so love to rest my pen to.(NATURE)...Thank you for the gold and the challenge...love a good challenge so what is next? Paula-Thank you so much. Glad you could see me in it. Victoria-Now would those be "BOOT" slippers????? Thank you much neighborMartie-Did you know that short of the skylite above the bed, the stream in the living room and you across the table with a cup of coffee, that this "IS" what I wake up to every morning!!! Spoiled aren't I?? BTW..."you" don't ever need an invite for coffee, just show up and we will watch the clouds roll by through til dawn of the next day  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marsha-You snuck in on me while I was replying!!! NOW STOP THAT!!! HHMMMMMmmmm a *sigh* from a rose...now that would make an image filled poem wouldn't it? Thank you so much for your dedication and for the title of my next poem I think. |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
ok i don't know what the challenge was, but whatever you do, you do it well *holds out her empty cup* got some extra coffee? you make your home sound so welcoming, would love to sit and watch the sunrise with you how you do those visual images so well I don't know, I always write about feelings, so when I sit down to enjoy one of yours its like a trip into a kaleidoscope of beauty |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
jinxed-The challenge was to write about your dream house and it is in the challenge forum still if you go back a day or two. And YES, you may have as many cups of coffee as you like and I too would love to watch the sunrise with you my friend. The visuals are just the way I see things just as the way you write is the way that you feel and you do that so well. Thank you so much for your always kind words. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
WOW Mark!!! What a picture you paint here! I love this!!! Honest! I never thought of a room in a house quite this way. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, Mark! You need a roomie??? Sounds like my kind of place! I'm no butterfly but maybe I could attach some plastic wings on my....well, maybe not  Love the place! |
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Jhonbus Junior Member
since 2000-10-12
Posts 25Sheffield UK |
The picture you painted with that was so beautiful - there's just something amazing about waking up with the early morning dew! And Thanks a lot for this, it made me smile |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mark~ this sounds like a lovely morning......must have been on a day off!......oh and you need some daisies outside your kitchen window...my favorite. -SEA< !signature-->Live,Love,Laugh ~SueB[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Mark- wow...i love this...absolutely beautiful. so...do you have a spare room? maybe need a live-in housekeeper or something?? lol this is great! -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
passing shadows-Thank you so much and I am glad that I could share my dream with you. Balladeer-Sure my friend...pack them bags and come on over. Have a butterfly's mom on the way too for you maybe. If I can arrange that would you promise to "NOT" try on those wings of yours please? Jhonbus-Yes the morning dew is so cleansing with just it's freshness...goes good with a cup of coffee. Once again welcome to Passions and I KNOW you will love it here and thank you. SEA-Planting daisies NOW...this very minute...now will you come and watch the sunrise with me through the sky-lite? Thank you much.vicky-Housekeeper you say? With "ALL" the fringe benefits? SURE...tossing out my mom now...come on over LOL!!!! Thank you my friend and I will put an extra cup on for you. Looks like it is going to be a crowded house after all but as long as it is all poets then who would complain. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I must be in the enchanted land with water streams flowing lots of magic, this was very delightful. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Rosebud1229-The land of enchantment is it?LOL Thank you so much and glad you enjoyed it. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Mark, What a dream home indeed! Best part is the pond! And of course the coffee...yum This was all a vision of beauty. Had to come back and read this one a few times, really enjoyed. deb |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Deb-Somehow I knew you would like the coffee!!!! I am glad that you enjoyed and found it good enough to read more than once. Thank you my friend. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Mark I am so impressed with this one you've penned! By the way Mark, I realize Balladeer has dibbs on roomie status per say, but how's the stables look out back (servant quarters) Perhaps youNbutterfly will need some caretakers around the house... I'm sure we can drum up some volunteers Always a delight reading your rhymes Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Coco-My sweet friend, you my dear may have the room directly across from Balladeer and no caretakers just friends sharing beautiful mornings together and I am sure that my butterfly feels the same....matter of fact I KNOW it to be true as her heart is as pure and precious as the gold in Heaven's gates. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is such a clear liquid picture - a luscious morning, so well worded - I really loved this. It took me there. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
If I keep posting the office's notes to our offical poet late. I'm going to end up hung drawn and quartered, bit messy, but you should see the punishment for being late with the tea! Anyway Mark my friend here goes, and I have to mention that Daphne kept this on her screen all through her shift! This is the best yet, I love this Daphne This is so beautiful Jan Great work David I love this one Delia Oh isn't this good Fran Wow Kelsy Super, doesn't he make it sound great Sue Yes I really like this one Pat Can we have this on the board Mel (Yes they can and now have it) At the years end we have decided to vote for our favourite, but since the group love each one more it's going to be difficult. Oh and I'm not allowed a vote. But they have all asked me to say your work is amazing and thank you for posting it for them to read. Also they think your replies are really nice! Take care Marsha 'Fan club Pres' |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~ Mark ~~ You have just written my dream house!! I have always had these blueprints in mind, in fact, I have drawn them up, and now here they are in print from you, my brother!!!! Beautiful........and the window bench overlooking the pond for morning coffee sounds like my favorite spot!!!!  Follow your dream! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Rosemary-I am so glad to have you visit my home. Thank you so very much. Marsha-You are so sweet....did I tell you that...thank you so much for making my day each and every day. Dapne-You honor me and I humbley thank you and send you a HUGE {{hug}} Jan, David, Delia,Fran, Kelsy,Sue, Pat, and Mel-I thank you all and I could never tell you just how much you all mean to me so I just send plenty of hugs to you all and yes it is okay for a cowboy to hug ALL his friends. I looked it up and it says by all means YES! Sunny-Great minds of wonderous dreams think alike...want to share the blueprints? Thank you so very much for you and for the "my brother"...makes me feel real warm inside and yes, you are my family...I know that!! Hugs to you my dear.[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 10-14-2000).] |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like this, Mark - Of course, morning is my favorite time of day... I think I'll take a walk to the beach now..  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
"Crimson and gold kissing orange against horizons so blue Blinds pulled up from floor to ceiling frames of clear view Prisms of color sliding across tiles of european styled class As the sun pierces the depths of my nauticalistic stained glass A wink from me with knowledge of what this day will now hold As I pass from room to room on carpets warm and tiles of cold Visiting last the pride of this poets eyes lost in his eternal dream As I down breakfast under the oak next to my living room stream" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Mark: This is breathtaking! By far my favorite of yours and one of my favorites here at Passions all together. Stunning imagery, that left visions permanently embedded in my mind. The two stanzas above are my favorite but this whole piece echoed with grace and tranquility. You do imagery proud. This is what I call poetic justice Take care m'friend. Amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Mark- hi, sweet cowboy... this is definitely one of my favorites of yours...and i think it deserves a bump today. love and hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend, Vicky isn't the only one missing you, these pages seem without a certain spark, I'm missing you too. She's right to bring this back to the front, it is indeed a wonderful, beauty filled picture. And on this rather grey and sad day I need something beautiful. Come back soon Cowboy, Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Mark!! wonderful trip you just took me on through your house...sounds very nice! I loved the way you guided me through this introduction to your day...always great to feel the warmth and decor of the familiar surroundings...hence home sweet home...Just wonderful things you're doing here my man and I'm glad to see you continuing...ethome... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
do you all realize what a heartwarming presence you will give Mark when he is able to return to the boards...seeing this, a challenge that I might have inspired, come to light...again...and again... it is a most delightful home, don't you think?... once again, Well done Mark...enjoy the glory... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
As I prowl around the archives, it shames me to notice just how many magnificent poems somehow escaped me adding my two cents worth. LOL. I remember reading this, Mark... and turning a rather unflattering shade of green with envy. LOL. I've never had a skylite above my bed, but when I had my condo, I'd often sleep on the couch so I could see the sky above my head (storms are especially neat *G*) The imagery you've used is so superb I could smell the coffee and the flowers. *S* Both your poem and the scene you've created are absolutely beautiful! So... I know your house is full... but I'm a great gardener... and every cowboy living in such paradise should have someone to care for his horse. *G* Can I have a job? LOL. I promise to be very discreet and make sure the house is vacant when I peek in the windows (and that's not just to give you and the missus privacy... I do NOT NOT NOT want to risk seeing Balladeer flutter by in those plastic wings! LOL) and I won't crush the plants, (but water them as I drool.) *G* 'Kay? I work cheap! LOL |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Wow Mark, what a dream. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
God! You certainly conquer challenges with grace and power! |
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