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In the Folds |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
In the FoldsLast evening lingers, unwilling to age Still, a hesitation on the morning stair A fragment torn but forgiven its rage Could the night have afforded repair? The edges of words not spoken aloud Frayed, fringed within the girder of guilt Steam sliding, pressing the seams of the shroud Laced linens wither in the folds of this quilt  ClaireCould a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Claire, What can I say but WOW!! Poignant...Beautiful All my love, Jeffrey |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Jeffrey, your WOW sure feels good to me this mornng...thank you.  I'm glad you enjoyed this. ~ Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire, you poetry always wows me too...wonderful! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Exquisitely written. Each line is a poem unto itself... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Martie...we must be mutually wow~ed, because yours keeps me consistantly in awe. Mike, I was actually hoping you'd have a chance to read this one. It fell together in just a few minutes this morning, and while writing, I was hoping to convey as much of the relationship as possible within as few lines as I could manage. Thank you for such an encouraging response. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Wow, again! Loved this read~ Marie~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Marie, I thank you for taking the time to read...glad you liked this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent, Claire, as always! Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I could tell just by the title that I would love this poem! Corinne |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Nice work Claire, I especially like the imagery in the lines... Steam sliding, pressing the seams of the shroud Laced linens wither in the folds of this quilt. Very Nice indeed. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful as always Claire, "The edges of words not spoken aloud Frayed, fringed within the girder of guilt" How I wish that sometimes, those words were spoken, and not just lost in the folds of anger. . . Simply wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Claire Magical phrases float on your page, in a beautiful mist, yet the meaning clear. That is a rare talent , my dear Liz |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is exquisite! I've got to memorize it! It tells such a haunting, poignant story, and I can almost smell that hot iron steaming over the shroud! I was especially caught by the line "Could the night have afforded repair?" This is a powerful painting! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
It is so rewarding to me to be able to share with you all. Thank you so much for letting me know that you enjoyed reading this little poem. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ms. Claire - Perhaps I read into this wrongly, or at least differently than others. I don't see beauty in this, though you use such flowing phrases. I see this indeed, with a depth of sadness that few poems can engender. I feel the heart's aching pain, I hear the fists of rage. All silently un-spoken, yet screaming out through a melding of whispered words. HUGS my friend. [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 04-26-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Chris, you've just looked inside my heart. ~ Claire |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So few words, betraying such emotional distress. Well done. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Claire ... even your sad songs are beautiful ... If you could only find some brighter colors for your pathwork Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
sunshine, thank you for reading this and letting me know what you think. I appreciate your words so much. Rex, thank you. You know, within all emotion lies beauty, I think, and I am trying to keep my eyes alert to those splashes of color along the path, more and more ...I promise. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Oh, Claire - you always paint such vivid images with your words! I feel like a voyeur to your soul.  Thank you so much for sharing your emotions so beautifully!Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh, Troy, thank you so much...all day I've been feeling a wee bit "off" and to see your reassuring comment tonight just really helps. Thank you for reading, and for letting me know that you enjoyed it. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, I felt the same as Chris, you did a wonderful job. *L* |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
ok will have to add my wow to this one...and yep I agree with chris...I felt the incredible sadness for what is there...and for what it should be...great writing! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ You write even your pain with tenderness, beauty and elegance. You share each heartbeat, each tear and each hug with the uniqueness that is you. Your poetry never ceases to touch me in some way and I thank you for that. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
you have identified pain with words and wed them together in a beautiful sadness....it's wonderful Kathleen |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
EXCELLENT!!! |
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