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Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 92
Salvador , Bahia , Brazil

0 posted 2000-04-26 11:12 PM


This poem is about a girl that I fell in love with , and she doesn't give a sh** about me, so I made this
So she could know how I really felt...

The Source Of My Pain

Some things are better left unsaid
But sometimes Silence can seem so loud
So I'd rather write all feel in this poem
I'm trying to forget you
As a matter of fact  , I did
I got you out of my head
But in my heart...
Oh! This pain just tears me apart...
I wish you could like me the way I do
And just for one moment
See me as I see you
See how your eyes take me away
To a place where all my dreams come true
In one day...
But this is only a wish
Only the last spark of hope left in my heart
Among with the pain that tears me apart
Sincerely I don't know what to do
I don't know which way to turn
Because every breath I take
I see that your love is only a fake
When is this doubt
Going to stop running 'round my brain?
When will you love me and finally end this reign?
Or forever will you be the source of my pain?
When I think I forgot you
You come again and stab me on my back
And I fall again...
For you...
It feels like you're toying with my mind
It seems like you're playing a game
Perhaps I am the source of my pain
But for now I only have you left to blame...
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 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society


[This message has been edited by Lone Ranger (edited 04-27-2000).]

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Cuddlez
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362
1 posted 2000-04-27 12:41 PM


When will you love me and finally end this reign?
Or forever will you be the source of my pain?
When I think I forgot you
You come again and stab me on my back
And I fall again...
For you...
It feels like you're toying with my mind
It seems like you're playing a game
Perhaps I am the source of my pain
But for now I only have you left to blame...
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What a powerful poem... You don't want to let go, yet they seem to cling in your heart. And they do stuff every once in awhile that puts you back in the lovespin when you are just getting your feet back on the ground??/ Loved it
~Cuddlez~

 Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
2 posted 2000-04-27 08:03 AM


Very emotion filled piece, I know how this feels, I relate to your pain, Great poem!
brandondinsmore
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since 1999-10-27
Posts 142
OKC, OK
3 posted 2000-04-27 09:41 AM


ditto
i know this pain, somewhat...except for the love part.  i have been hurt that bad, though, and it is hell.  i feel for you.

brandondinsmore
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since 1999-10-27
Posts 142
OKC, OK
4 posted 2000-04-27 09:42 AM


sorry about those stupid happy faces!  i didn't know that if you put two of these ( , that a happy face would appear!  sorry!
brandondinsmore
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since 1999-10-27
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OKC, OK
5 posted 2000-04-27 09:42 AM


dammit!  sorry again!
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-04-27 05:18 PM


I loved reading this and the writing style...I also have fallen in love with someone (many) and wondered why they didn't fall in love with me...and I hurt because they didn't fall in love with me.. It is not their fault...the love comes from inside us...if it is not there we can't expect the other person to love us.  We need to accept them as they are just as we would want them to respect us even if we didn't fall in love with them.  These are hard lessons to learn..and much sadness will come our way until we accept that we cannot force love to happen we can only stand back and watch it happen...and it will not happen based on our needs and desires.   James
Lone Ranger
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 92
Salvador , Bahia , Brazil
7 posted 2000-04-27 07:01 PM


Thanks everyone to reading this poem and replying it , this is really very important to me , and about this girl I REALLY DON'T KNOW WHAT TO DO!!

 "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free
It was always thus and always thus will be"
Prof. Keating
Dead Poets Society

pen of passion
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since 1999-08-11
Posts 234

8 posted 2000-04-27 09:20 PM


Very emotional.  Those mind games...
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
9 posted 2000-04-27 10:09 PM


Sometimes we have no choice but to let go
Best of luck with this

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