I attack through the center...

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Open Poetry #9

I attack through the center...

Master
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since 1999-08-18

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Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-08-26 03:50 PM

I attack through the center. The shortest distance
between two points is a straight line.
Thus if I take his queen first, for instance,
then his king is just a matter of time.
The pawns skip the squares on the first move only,
still not knowing their hierarchical order,
and the knights as though unicorns hop gracefully, calmly,
toward the enemy out of the corner.
The two queens rave in passion, becoming very ecstatic,
“off with her head!” pointing at each other.
Who would have thought chess would get so dramatic?
Black and white figures ardently hover
and only my king alone, is lonesome and grieving
neither charging nor hiding, just waiting
while his subjects are fighting for life and living,--
he is squared like some mime,- it’s degrading!
The black bishop makes two moves down the left lateral.
and the scorekeepers quickly record them.
At this time, my king resigns as the admiral
and commits suicide out of boredom.

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[This message has been edited by Master (edited 08-26-2000).]

Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

1 posted 2000-08-26 05:15 PM

Any suggestions on how I can make this poem better?

Sunshine

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2 posted 2000-08-26 05:19 PM

Master, how could "Checkmate" get any better than this? Well done!

Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

3 posted 2000-08-26 07:20 PM

Thanks Sunshine... To tell you the truth, I'm not much of a chess person, so this is my first "checkmate"!

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

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4 posted 2000-08-26 10:09 PM

I have yet to learn the strategies of chess Master, but this I know ... checkmate! Well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Master
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since 1999-08-18

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Boston, MA

5 posted 2000-08-27 12:06 PM

Thank Kit, glad you liked it!

Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

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6 posted 2000-08-27 10:55 PM

This is one of those great interesting poem that I was looking to read it. Thank you for writing it. You have great talent.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

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