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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
The sky is so blue today Clouds are scattered along the way I replay slowly in my mind The events that I rewind Hard to imagine me here alone Talking to you on the phone What led us to this place? Can the past be retraced? I look back trying to see Where it got away from me When did it start to fall apart? Why did you break my heart? I wish I knew the cause Of why my life is paused I feel the hurt and pain Of a love that was slain It permeates through my soul On my body it takes a toll Fatigue finally settles in Then my head no longer spins Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
it must truly hurt as you have poetically penned these feelings one may go through when that love is no longer ours..tis sad..nicely done lone wolf. "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey you...some people pay good money just to do that "head-spinning" thing...lol...hugs and open heart to you. EVERYTHING'S GONNA BE FINE, FINE, FINE... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Lone Wolf ... very tender and heartfelt ... you've expressed your emotions well in this sorrowful verse. Nicely penned!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I ditto Kit on this one.. she took away all that I was just going to say... regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nicely penned, but in your eyes your sorrow showed. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ 'I wish I knew the cause Of why my life is paused' Oh, my friend - the fact that it's on pause is to give you time to reflect on which way you're going. Keep writing and sharing. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Lone Wolf, Such sadness, but a poet with much heart felt desire to understand has shown it through poetry so beautifully, best wishes to you my friend. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JnR4eva . . . Yes, it hurts but that is how we move on. Thank you. Serenity . . . Hey you! LOL, I'd NEVER pay for that!!! Thank you!! Kit . . . Thank you my friend. Sometimes I wish they weren't so sad. Sudhir . . . Wow, you are speechless? Shame on Kit for stealing your words!! LOL . . . just kidding. Kethry . . . The sorrow is abundant these days. Thank you for reading. Marge . . . I know, this is a crossroads for me. The way is not clear, but I will find it. I will always write and share my friend. Thank you. Cerenity . . . Hi there, yes I am sad. But I do so want to understand all this one day. Thank you for the wishes. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jenn...I know what you are going thru, and I am here for you my friend I hope you know that...powerful words here girl. |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Your reflection here is so painful and remorseful...feelings that take talent to portray well...Well done, Lone Wolf! Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Soon my dear friend.......soon! I know it hurts and you want all the answers...sometimes they never come though. AW hugs sweetie!!! You have put this pain to the best possible use though.....write it out and let it go on the wings of the poetry angels~~~~~~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When it's time, the  will shine Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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