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Gentle Rose- Trilogy
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Gentle Rose- Trilogy |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I. Do you hear the snowflakes falling, Upon your cold and silent tomb? Do you hear my heartbreak calling, To Gentle Rose, my precious bloom? I thought you were forevermore, Until the night, were stole away, Now forever, means nevermore, Except your void, pain's here to stay. I kneel alone, my soul disguised, In center of life's barren stage, Forgotten lines now improvised, My scripted heart, a worn blank page. O' Gentle Rose, as snowflakes fall, On bended knee, to thee I call. II. One year has past, since Gentle Rose has died, Since dirges played and silent mourners cried, When does the pain release its viselike grip Upon mine soul, let loose this sinking ship? Adrift upon this childless sea, I gaze, Upon her empty room, as empty days, In silent scream, black pain does overwhelm, No where I sail, no Captain at the helm. O' Gentle Rose, why won't you set me free, I beg of you, why won't you answer me? Do not you hear, I sing your hymns of praise? Upon my knees, I seek your sweet bouquets. O' Gentle Rose, your bud will never bloom, But yet I fear, 'tis I within the tomb. III. Gentle Rose, for e'er I will remember, Thy perfect grace, asleep in final slumber, Angelic face, upon death's pillow lay, As mourners weep and silent dirges play, Cries of grief and sorrow, silence of the tomb, What requiem, for rose that ne'er will bloom? What bell does toll the passing of a child? A life so young, so pure... unreconciled That death should grasp her now without remorse Just as her life sets sail its rocky course Come Terpsichore, and sing your songs of dance And curse the evil Thanatos whose lance Strikes deep into the mourner's grieving soul Rise up I pray, her life I do extol A Gentle Rose, whose beauty graced this earth A loving soul, so caring, full of mirth, I beg of thee, no songs of sorrow weep, But shout our hymns of praise, so all might keep, Her in our hearts for e'er, for we have known A Gentle Rose, that God now calls his own. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-08-2000).] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Wow...that blurred the page...misted me up... Wonderful read...  )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Painful yet beautifully written. This appears to me to be stages of the grieving process. Very well done. Denise |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mike, this is so sad yet written so well. Maybe the following part could be about the Angle Rose..............-SEA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This poem is so beautifully written and the message so clear and true--The emotion you have clothed in words of such perfect perception that it broke my heart. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all for your very kind comments. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Humble bow, my friend..  |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Your words show that love lives forever more.. Very heart touching Mike If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Mike we are not being nice. We are being honest. This is so beautiful! You have a great 'sonnet' talent...quite close to (shall I say it?) the Bard!  |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
EXACTLY what I was thinking, Poet deVine.....  very well, done, Mike.  Bobbycat=^..^= |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Absolutely breathtaking....beautiful, romantic, loving...and sad all wrapped in one grand package. You are extremely talented. Lovely, Mike. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike- The title called to my heart ... the content left me in tears. Well-done, gentle heart. Very well done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I am humbled by your responses. Thank you ever so much for the comments. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed your poem,Mike. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
mike, WoW!! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, Not only is this poem emotionally stirring and deftly evocative...it is so well written! This piece has that archaic, yet timeless feel to it that I am drawn toward, and you have such a gift with the language. I could read your work all day. Claire |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Exquisite, Mike. You portray the emotions felt with the loss of a loved one breathtakingly well. We should all be so talented. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
This was a most exqusite poem. I loved it! Very heartfelt. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Yep..this one does it for sure Tim. I have become your greatest fan! This was exquisite! |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
I have to agree....this is beautifully written. A timeless piece indeed! |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, these poems are so beautiful! Their anguished sorrow reads like music, like the old poets, in that poignant and haunting way. You have a tremendous talent in writing, and your sorrow tears at my heart. I am so terribly sorry for your loss. What a great love you have for your Gentle Rose. I would be honored if you might, some day, feel like peeking at my memorial poetry site designed for all of us who have lost beloved children, or anyone. It is a place for sharing poetry of love and memories. Called "Coming Through the Fire", its URL is: http://www.angelfire.com/zine/bereaved You could e-mail me there, if you wish, at [email protected] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
As I indicated in the earlier post, I am humbled by your responses. Rosemary, I was the one honored to be able to visit your site. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Excellent my drear Watson, While I listen to "Bet's" love is a rose. Oh how I wish more could only hear you. All my best, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tim/Mike~ This is even more beautiful on second read~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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