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Just One Mile
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Just One Mile |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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Just One Mile ~Marge Tindal~ He whined that the world was out to get him. He moaned, he groaned and he bitched. I was among those who tired real quick of him and tried to give him the ditch. Through life he walked and complained. It was one thing after another. The hardships he'd borne, the shoes he'd worn ... one thing after another, after another, after another. Behind his back we often scoffed, to his face we did the same. No matter that he walked away from the taunt of our refrain. The day came when his step slowed. He sat on a bench with much pain. He gestured me to join him. I drew close as he tried to explain. Son, take these shoes from my wearied feet, place them on yours, my path to repeat. Walk a mile in my shoes, then tell me why, if you can , they've always, always hurt my feet. When you've traversed the roads I've traveled, the indifference you'll see I've endured. Walk just one mile in my shoes, before you close my door. I put those shoes on my feet. I stood and began the trek. In shoes I didn't know existed I saw tears from a different view as my eyes were now misted. Walking just one mile in his shoes, I saw the rebuke, the indifference, the blame. I hate to admit it now, but, more than once, I was cause of his blisters. I hang my head in shame. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Oh Marge, this is so beautiful. It should be hung in every home and every public building.This is so beautifully written. Your talents are overwhelming Liz |
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Bad Boy Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 78 |
This is the best of the new day Marge. This is something that happens alot in the world today. Thank you for sharing this piece this morning Marge. P.S.Could you give TOE some pointers? lol j.k.  The Devil Made Me Do It. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Powerful poem, Marge... well done!! |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
This is a terrific and thoughtful piece of work Marge. Great job! fh |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Marge...very thought provoking. It seems that we all know someone we scoff at but at the same time we could be those being scoffed at. Very well written from another's pov. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Wow Marge! Ya mean he gave ya the shoes for free?...... This is superb sweets.....I think you get better every day. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Well done marge. as said before extremly thought provoking. Well enjoyed Richard |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Enjoyed the new spin on an old saying...very well done, Marge! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wise words from a wise heart! Beautiful, Marge!  Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--You have created a very thought provoking poem here. Very well done! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Where to Start *If I live in a house of spotless beauty with everything in its place then I find little gratitude for my duty though my curtains are dressed in lace if I only have time for waxing and polishing my friends will learn of cleanliness love leaves the dust in search of a persons laughter love smiles at the fingerprints on the fresh cleaned window sash love wipes away the tears before it wipes the spilled mess love is the key that opens a message to a person’s heart and always blesses and forgives the rest is history but I know not where to start.* (unknown) lucky |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
Beautiful! This one makes you stop & think before you speak. Nicely done. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend- I do thank you from my heart for this lovely compliment on my writing. Suthern- Thank you so much. Fred Hobbs- I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Wild Child- Thanks, hon. We should all try on another's shoes from time to time. Toe- Thank you for the ultimate compliment. And you *rascal* ... ain't nuthin' in life free ! The price of bandaids to cover the blisters is awfully expensive ! Richard- If I provoked any thought ... then I did what I set out to do. Thank you. Sunshine- Thanks for liking the spin. Denise- Thanks to you. You're always here. I like that. Martie- I'm glad that so many found it thought-provoking. That was my intent, indeed. Lucky- That is a beautiful reply. I guess we really do know that the starting place is within ourselves. Thank you for sharing that. Deb Lynne- Yes, I guess the age-old axiom, 'actions speak louder than words' would be appropriate here. Thank you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent poem, Marge. This poem speaks much truth, as you well know. I'd walk a mile in your mocassins  |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
To you dearest Marge The piece you've done I am I awe Can't still believe what I saw The words you inked are so true I don't know what to say to you Seldom do I lose my way Excellent, Beautiful, Brilliant....is not enough to say The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer- Thanks. Quietly my mocassins would take you on trips of a different view. I'd enjoy walking in your shoes too. Helmut Becker- You found just the right words to make me feel really good about this piece. Thank you, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Applauding fervently!!!! WOnderful work Marge...you've taught us all a lesson in this piece |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
Inappropriate comment [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-26-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
SnglDad: Apparently you're the only one offended by Marge's writing... but your comments will offend many... including me. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Thought provoking...definetly! Wonderful piece Marge...and the last two lines....powerful!! I haven't been around much lately...so I don't understand what's with SngDad...but, I think his comments would be better left unsaid...aarrgh... [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 01-26-2000).] |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
SnglDad..... I can't believe you! If you don't have sometning nice to say- keep your big mouth shut! Marge, this for some reason, made me think of my Dad, I always thought he was so wrong on so many things.....the older I got, the more I realized I am now walking in my Dad's shoes with my kids. These shoes are killin me! My parents wished for me to have kids "just like me" - I now have 3.  -SEA |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Marge, your poem is excellent. Although we are all entitled to our opinion, rudeness is not necessary. Since Sngl Dad has removed his email address, this will have to be said publicly. If you read our Guidelines, you will find this: Before posting a reply, take a moment to think: Will the writer be hurt if you 'slam' his or her writing? If you are angry, perhaps it's not a good time to respond. Above all - and this is perhaps the only non-negotiable rule you'll find at Passions - do not attack the person because you find their words disagreeable. If you absolutely must express your opinion, confine it to the content of the post. Doing otherwise will only insure your reply is quickly deleted by a Moderator You can be critical of the poem, but do not use rudeness and personal attacks on the poet to make a point. This is not acceptable behavior. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
First - Marge, you've written a great spinoff of an old adage.... I enjoyed reading it, as it made me think of the many years of "non" communication I've had with my own father... Looking at things from his perspective puts a whole new light on things... Secondly - SnglDad - Kindly recall our Forum Guidelines. If you don't like a poem, feel free to say so, respectfully... Direct slams on our authors, however, are not acceptable here at Passions. They are both inappropriate and in poor taste. Please refrain from such diatribe in your future comments on these boards. Thank you Nancy |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Divine One and Miss Nancy... a great big curtsy in gratitude. *S* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Marge, your poem is a message to the world...thank you for the gifting. Claire |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Marge I enjoyed this very much! Leaves one thinking of many things! Well done!! Clapping! and a hug too! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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CrazyChick Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132 |
Great work!!!!! I really enjoyed this one |
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kaleidoscope Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 38 |
I love this poem. So much wisdom, so much caring. Well worded, and filled with such deep meaning! If only everyone thought like this! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
very thought provoking indeed Marge. Well Done! as usual Loved it!!What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Though I can't imagine what was posted here that could in anyway be a "slam" to this fine poet and poem....I do agree with Nan, I think all derrogatory and slamming remarks should be reserved for and aimed at LongJohn and Balladeer. [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-27-2000).] |
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