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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages 
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Little tiny splashing boots Puddles along wet rainy moods Twirls, swirls and alas Leaps and jumps in middle of plash Little tiny splashing arms Plays along with childish charms Spits and pats with water drops Rainy boots thoroughly sops Little tiny chuckling face Puts a spell with innocent grace Paddles and dabbles to enhance Wee performer’s rainy dance  Charisma ~TMP~ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Cool! (I don't quite have the hang of this yet) Love your last line, C! "Wee performer’s rainy dance" "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I liked your use of sound and I especially like this line; "Little tiny splashing boots Puddles along wet rainy moods" Good job on your poem! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
See, you all make this seem so easy. It's not easy. That Ono... word alone is longer than most the poems I write. lol Great job, Charisma. I just don't seem to get it, myself. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW Charisma, what a wonderful and lovely onomatalittledance  Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Well, Charisma ... look at you go girl ~ Too cool for school ! Oh, no ... that's Duncan~  Nicely done ... my friend~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Charisma , Yellow slicker with matching boots this poem here is way too cute ! Doc |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Thank you all for your reply, as I was so unsure about this one. I hope that it is a bit the way that a onomatopoeia must be done. But it was fun to try one, even if my muse didn't get it all. (ok I hide behind my being dutchy thing) Charisma |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Oh You did such a great job i am gonna try one myself. Way to go Suzanne |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Charisma, I think you understand onomasomething much and much better than I! Way to go girl! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Splashin' & Puddlin'... I like this Charisma - You've got the hang of onomatopoeia... Um.. How would I EVER do the same in your language?...:  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Thanks all.....and so that I've got it a bit. and Nan....you don't know how to do this in my language, :p.....mmmm thought at least you could give it a try, just like we dutchies tried this one ok....ok....just kidding. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Ah, this is so cute. I think I'm starting to get the hang of this onowhatever thing If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Suzanne and Tracey, come on in, its soooooo much fun here, and I am looking forward for yours.    [This message has been edited by Charisma (edited 10-20-2001).] |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is so cute. You've really got this onomatowhatever thing worked out. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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