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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
While Father Time tick tocks away Whispering memories escape With a whoosh on the squeaking floor Leaving giggles in life's corridor To drip into the waterfall The splattering force of laughter Beholder of glimmering gems Of friendships everlasting While Father Time tick tocks peacefully Ok guys, please feel free to rip it apart. I'm trying to understand this onomatopoeia thingy and honest critique would be highly appreciated.  Here's one for all you native English people: De kat krabt de krullen van de trap met drie gedroogde doeken. By the time you can say all that without hesitation I'll know how to write onomatopoeia.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Munda~ You greatly underestimate your capabilities~ This is WONDERFUL ~ Not EVEN touching the Dutchie thingie~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Great onomatosomething you wrote there  YES YES, that will teach them right Munda. Here is another one for all of you: Sien heeft de zon in de zee zien zakken (Sien did see the sun sank into the sea) Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/ [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 10-11-2001).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"While Father Time tick tocks away Whispering memories escape With a whoosh on the squeaking floor Leaving giggles in life's corridor" This is wonderful! I loved this poem And your tongue twister at the end, I got the meaning and enjoyed reading it aloud, though you would laugh at my pronunciation. Enjoyed! Liz |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Munda, The cat scratched the curl from the stairs with three dried cloths?  What in the world does that mean? Nice onomatasomething. Ats'a lot'a think'n Gene |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
whoooohoooo Munda, I like it a lot, even that I not yet made a onomatosomething *lol* Charisma |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Munda, The cat scratched the curl of the trap against three dried curtains??? Okay, You're onomatopoeia poem is MUCH better than my Dutch translation! LOL! Great job! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
When I read it, I get it. I just don't get it, when I try to write it. Very cool, Munda. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thanks guys... glad you liked it, but I still don't know if this is a onomatopoeia or not. LOL Liz... you actually tried to pronounce that Dutch gibberish? Wow! Way to go girl! Gene & Romy: It doesn't really matter what it means. It's all in the pronounciation. I know many Dutch who can't say that line without hesitation.  But it's great you tried to figure out the meaning of it, although you cheated Gene! Duncan - I don't even get it when I write it! LOL Thanks for taking the time to read and reply everybody. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It really IS a Dutch mutiny... I was right all along...  It's good too...  |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Munda, I agree with Marge...this is wonderful...don't underestimate your talent! The dutch part...well...by the time I can read it and pronounce all the words...father time will be gone for good! good work! Cindi |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
You did a good job o yuh |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Hey this is pretty good, particularly if English isn't your first language. It is my first language, and I'm trying to figure out how to do one of these If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
The worst that could happen to you Nan is we turn in the three Muskerettes... no I didn't say Muskrats! Cindi - Walt - Tracey - Thanks!  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Three Muskerettes      Love tha idea girly  : |
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