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Fishing (Alison Style)
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Fishing (Alison Style) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Gentle laps the warmth of thighs Teasing the ragged, jagged Bottom of cutoff levi’s Pale skin implores the sun’s touch Nylon line swooshes into humid air Casting high into the current And the hook is a pawn Only a pawn Sinking, skimming the surface, Drowning in brown silt heavy Garish colors seeking attention Longing to lazily float Then slipping into murky waters Carrying surrendered glaciers Some place, any place Overhead the clouds accumulate Dismal chaste gray drapes The candy-colored piñata sun (Far too loud on a khaki day) Beckoning water Promises cool caress Sensual heat builds Casting away the day The line caught in silver A kind of mathematical arc Released by unbending laws of physics Gulping the lure into the water With a burp Beavers slap tag-you’re-it games As intruding rain showers Draw magic rain rings Drum rat-a-tatting rhythm On Cottonwood leaves - Alison |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
i sont know why you wrote this, but it speaks directly to me. thank you |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
This is a great poem about fishing. I am going to print it off and read it through later today and then reply again. It is raining with thunder and lightening here in Nebraska in the very early morning. So I am up reading poetry. I like your poem. Let my study it a little longer later today and then I will reply again. Thanks |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Fishing Alison-style, sounds pretty dang good to me! Shove, Love! Give me a bit of that shore-line!  "The candy-colored piñata sun (Far too loud on a khaki day)" ~ Uniquely descriptive!!! Thoroughly enjoyed this respite from ha hustling-bustling day! Happy fishing!   Linda xo |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Did you catch anything? I like your style of fishing. LOL! |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Very nice. You wrote this so well I was feeling it way over here in michigan. Thanks for taking me fishing Alison. Yoin |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Alison, How do you do that? You take my breath away as the words that I read slip quietly between my lips and smile at the picture you paint. Ok, on the other side, I sure would love to see you in cutoffs, knee deep in the river with a fly caster in your hands. Oh-Yeh!!!! Love always, Tracey |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Z, you've managed to take what I have long regarded as the most boring activity in existence and make it sound alluring. I love the way you do that! Arana Darkwolf |
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zaaclindsay Member
since 2009-08-12
Posts 111Ottawa Ontario |
this reminds me so much of my grandfather and my uncle. they were the ones that taught me to fish, while in so doing taught me more life lessons about when to hold on, when to pull back, when to wait patiently, and above all to laugh. zaac |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hi Brad, I am glad that this poem spoke to you. That's a wonderful thing to hear. I was playing with Bob K's challenge in the Alley and thinking about how much I love to fish. I was playing with cadence and discriptions mostly. Thank you. Alison - GBride, Wow. You have made me smile as I sip my tea and enjoy the poetry here this morning. Print away and please do come back. xoxoxo Alison - Hey Linder Lou, You come on down any day and I'll "shove over". Anything for a partner in poetic crime! I love you. Alison - Yoin, Isn't it cool how universal fishing is?' Fish on!  A - Sue, Nope. Just caught some bed bugs when I was finished. I wrote this one from the memory of a beautiful day. Thank you, sweet friend. xoxoxo Alison - Tracey, Tracey, Tracey ~ I love reading your responses to my poems. You are funny and kind. Plus, you have a personal style that I love. Thank you, my friend. Hugs, Alison - Rachael, What a wonderful thing to tell me! Fishing is fun - it's almost Zen. I love you, Z - zaac, I am glad that I brought back the memories. I think laughter is number one on that list. I am happy you stopped in and let me know you were here. Alison |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I can see you out there, pale legs and all having a day of stream-fun, not caring whether or not you caught anything beyond sun-rays....and I really enjoyed your sun imagery! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Kacy. I love when you come in and see the day. Isn't that what Carpe Diem means "See the Day!". Okay, okay, I am kidding. I am not kidding that I smiled to see your comment. Love, Alison |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Alison - like your fishing style, need some of it here. No fishies yet... BC |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Bill. You know You can't give up. They'll be along. xoxoo Alison |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
I really love the line "the hook is a pawn..." Your poem is great. Been wanting to intoduce my first grandson to fishing; you have urged me not to wait. Cal |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Cal, Go do it and have fun. Lots of fun with him. Thank you for reading. Hugs, Alison |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
Wow, girl! Talk about imagery! I should be reading a lot more of your poems - then I could learn a lot. nice! Rileigh |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hey Rileigh, I think you are doing just fine on what you are learning. Maybe I am learning from you too. xoxoxo A |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Add a cooler of beer, and I am right there with you Ali. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
CG - You're on! A |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
If you like to fish, read my Rumble Riddled Umble Pie. Follow the directions and see what you catch. :-D |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
I enjoyed your poem very much. I love to fish too and it was fun traveling with you. I wish I had time to fish. I just finished my book of poetry which will be out at Christmastime. Hugs Kimberly |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Most descriptive writing, Alison. Indeed a pleasure to read! Helen |
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peaceseaker Member
since 2009-07-29
Posts 161 |
Boy oh boy...I had to read this more than once...some wonderful imagery..sometimes I try to qoute a favorite vs...but I loved them all..so hard to do....It's really interesting that you speak of fly fishing in this, as I was most recently down to Bennett Springs, Mo...a fly fishing park there..it was absolutely beautiful and to watch so many fly fishing, was mesmerizing as was the mirror clear cold water...absolutely enjoyed this read..Alison...thank you for sharing....peaceseaker |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
I love fishin' and your style. Adored, H |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
you make fishing sound like fun. I used to love it, but I haven't been in forever. Love your words girlie  Love, Me The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
girly this is my most favorite poem of yours... really great writing, Alison I love your nature poems, but it was really nice to see you write about you loved this line: Dismal chaste gray drapes love ya, shel . flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ali-san..white girl fishing sounds kinda sexy..can you say beaver in here? I usually stop off at the SPCA and pick up a few cats for bait with I go out to the islands on the Makya Hurl..it is a 31 footer that sleeps 25 if they get drunk enough..the first mate, (Julie) and I got divorced 20 years ago..she is known for her fish tacos..and being able to spit Redman into a long neck from 20 feet away... since you asked... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If'n you'll bring the Off I'll be there... I'll be there...  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Alison, you hooked a fish with this one, me, your poem is so graceful and eloquent, describe fairly the gestures of the fish, give me envy to be a fisherman in river...Thanks for the original and convincing poem. yann |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
martiniat8 I'll look your poem up one day soon. A - Kimberly, That's great news! Congratulations! Thank you for stopping in and commenting too. Alison - Dear Helen, Thank you lots. Alison - peaceseaker, Wow. What a wonderful response. I am really flattered. Thank you. Alison - H Thank you and backatcha! A - Kris, I think it might be time for you to go again. Just enjoy being out and quiet. Thank you, darlin'. xoxoxo Alison - shel, Thank you so much! I used to write more about me - but I decided that there were more interesting things to write about! Love you, A - Daark, My cat says things to you that I can't write here. Just come on up sometime, he'll pee on your boots -- and in them too! A - Sunshine, I have a bottle with your name on it. xoxoxo A - yann, You are the very best! Thank you .. xoxoxo Alison |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
A fine blend of romance, fishin' and hot sultry summer days. Loved this Alison Katriona |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you so very much, Katriona. It's nice of you to take the time to comment. Alison |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Sounds like a perfect day in the ease of nature, Bloodline |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
It actually was. It was a memory maker-keeper day. Thank you, bloodline. A |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Alison, enjoyed your fishing poem very much my friend, kept me in a calming place for a while, great words. Rick |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine impressionistic imagery! I am especially fond of: "Overhead the clouds accumulate Dismal chaste gray drapes The candy-colored piñata sun (Far too loud on a khaki day)" MUCH applause for this 'penning' !! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
oohhhhkay! Now, where's my bait...  uhhh, we ARE going deep sea fishing, right??  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Now this is what I would call romantic fishing, dear Alison! (but being oversensitive ever since I was a little girl watching fishermen at the lake, I am glad you didn't catch any fish, as I can't see them struggling in the air and die ... I do eat them though  ... such incongruence!)Incredibly well done, girl! Love, Margherita  |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
My kind of poem, Allison. Visual and filled with warmth. Your poetry always seems to convey that extra touch of light and home Jan |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Have you caught any fish yet? |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Lovely images and such beautiful words…wonderful write "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Rick, Thank you, friend. Glad you went to that place with me. Alison - Bruce, Thank you. So often you make me smile and thank you for that and for reading. Alison - Sunny One, Halibut? A - Margherita, I actually understand. I am so glad you are back sharing with us. Thank you for enjoying this one of mine. xoxoxo Alison - Jan, That is such a lovely thing to tell me. Thank you. Alison - CG, A few this summer. Most were catch and release Grayling. Thanks for being in here reading. A - Prasad Nataraj Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. You bring me pleasure with your response. Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Is there room for one more? *S* Or I can just settle back and watch... as I "guard" the beer cooler? *S* This is delightful, Alison! *S* |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
C'mon down, Ruth (or is that come on up? Yep. Whatever). There's always room for another poetic friend with smiles. Thank you, A |
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