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il finit (charcoal man and his lady)
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il finit (charcoal man and his lady) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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he sits in vieux carre head between hands staring at dusty feet breathing stale air calypso is dead rotting in his lapel Panama droops on weary knee cathedral bells ship horns trumpets giggling women sing café au lait perfume cross his smelling still he sits empty carapace quick fresh breeze fingers his heart lady’s voice? mais oui he turns raw silk skirt slit side familiar leg lady laugh on her arm a fat boy round legs arms rosy lip bent to milk bubbles dark shadow hair tiny hand reaches for breast no no no lady grabs fist red lip bends to mother love milk teeth flash she kisses a soft cheek tickles a round tummy deep heart deep in love charcoal man’s eyes seek hers she turns away lady she does not answer lady my heart pains she smiles oui I know darlin’ qui m'a fait souffert aussi long temps pour ça I suffered so long please lady just look lady’s breath is wrapped in stop heart does not beat right red lip bends to moment lady please my heart aches she craves arms around him head in shallow valley between his shoulders smelltaste of him he holds shaky hand toward her dry mouth whispers lady she reaches for breath finds none her heels turn she looks at him lost again ah mon homme allons à la maison let’s go home ol ‘gator will think we gone forever his smile is small weary the chouchoot mon fils? red lip bends to shy smile lady twirls her pretty self laughs oui papa buy a cigar for you and a noonie for your chouchoot charcoal man slips Panama to boy’s tiny head kisses lady’s red lip when he can have cigar beb? lady slaps at charcoal man misses mon rogue! il commence il finit |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
it's over I want to thank all of you for your encouragement Karilea for her "noodge" my muse for the frenzy of it all... I have enjoyed myself |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 Oh, well done! Smiling here...not the ending I expected... but the ending most deserved! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Karilea not the ending I expected either but it wanted to be written that way I obliged...  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
 Oh Kate I have shivers of delight at this magnificent ending you have come up with!! A pefect ending, you had me from the first post to this incedibly fantastic finale. One can but only whisper...brava...... with courtseys, from one lady, to another... HUGS  |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I'm glad you enjoyed it Donna couldn't bring myself to hurt either of them and the chouchoot's so darned adorable... thank you dear Lady hugs |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you. Thank you for the gift of Charcoal Man and his Lady. Thank you for breathing life into them Thank you for making me smile and laugh -- always delighting in them Thank you for ending as you did. Thank you for you. aziza |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladyone..nice ending..perhaps she will dance from time to time at the rowdy dow.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I applaud you, Lady Kate! This magnolia series kept one's attention from the inception to the denouement. A class 'A' piece of writing! Totally captivating and compelling! Love & Southern Light, Linda |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady...the color and magic of this series plays like a movie...could be a movie, but who, who could play the roles as well as poetry?  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When all the superlatives have been used.. may I simply say Brava! And thank you! I may not have replied to each in this series, but I have been here, awaiting the next post.. my eyes searching your name. Superb writing!! Hugs~Nancy ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
What and unexpected finale, but well done. I've enjoyed this all the way through. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Brava! Brava! Thank you for a wonderous journey! You are a magnificent writer. Sandra |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
It just can't be over....oh, well.....all's well that ends well, and this most certainly did! Wonderful work, Kate! *hugs*....jo |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Kate, I have sat nightly, savoring each installment of your talented heart. This was magnificent! The entire journey was just magnificent! TD |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you for your sweetness aziza and for your witty replies… it’s been fun yes Stranger she will put on her sunshine dress have a big time at the rowdy dow … while he takes his chouchoot frog giggin’ thank you for all of it thank you for being there Linda Angel… love and beaucoup southern light to you… thank you for coming along Martie… in poetry people are always as we like in our mind’s eye, yes? thank you for being there Nancy I felt your eyes… unexpected finale to me too Steve I didn’t know she was enceinte till she took to her bed thank you for being with them… thank you Sandra! and thanks for your encouragement… one night I kept him home just for you I think it’s far from over jo the last part is yours to write… thank you for being with us faithfully hugs thank you TD I am happy you took the journey with us... Kate |
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Spike Daft Junior Member
since 2006-09-12
Posts 23CA, USA |
Again, your imagery and way with words and rythm astound me. A wonderful piece, though I am sorry to see the series end.  And thank you so much also for your kind comments on my poems. Grey Matter Custom Images |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Andrea and you're welcome... |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I don't want it to end. Kate, thank you. Love Alison |
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