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trutodaraiders
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0 posted 2006-12-22 12:52 PM



Farewell my sweet elusive dove,
Please sweep away your tears,
'Twas you - I only ever loved,
And happy were my years.

And as each leaf is falling,
Blown by winds obscure,
Long my heart be calling,
For our souls to long endure.

For your heart is not for grieving,
With this… our last goodbye,
And I hate the thought of leaving,
Or knowing I must die.

Unseen I'll flit on your fair cheek,
Look down and gently smile,
My love for you I'll always seek,
And joyful - that we loved awhile

          

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~



© Copyright 2006 Bill Franklin - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2006-12-22 12:55 PM


...so soft, and sweet, and sad...

Thy quill be that of a dove's feather.


EA

trutodaraiders
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2 posted 2006-12-22 12:58 PM


Thanks Earthangel for leaving me a comment. I was really depressed when I wrote tihs poem ):
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3 posted 2006-12-22 03:29 PM


damn
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2006-12-29 01:21 AM


can't believe this one nearly slipped me by my sweet Bill... a nice write here.  
Be Well
RDB

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5 posted 2006-12-29 03:00 AM


This is a beautiful poem.
Thanks for sharing it.
Hugs,
Ethel

MoonShadow
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6 posted 2006-12-29 05:41 PM


    A most heartfelt epitaph... would you consider switching the last two quatrains... check it out and see how it reads... just a thought.

       MoonShadow

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7 posted 2006-12-29 06:44 PM


so sad....

~~**~~
Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

trutodaraiders
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8 posted 2006-12-29 06:54 PM


Thanks for the reads..Moonshadow I agree with you. Thanks for pointing it out. I'll do a repost soon with a edit.. (:
The Lady
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9 posted 2006-12-30 10:06 PM



excellent work
I agree with Dixie

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