The Price - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

0 posted 2006-12-17 05:23 AM

The stars fall from the sky devoid of brightness
The moon becomes a shadow of the night
Dark is creeping up the morning's lightness
The tears that gather steal away your sight.

The rose has lost its color and its beauty
No longer can you smell its sweet perfume
For loving you has turned into a duty
And life is now more lifeless than the tomb.

I wish we could go back to the beginning
I wish that we could buy back yesterday
When loving you seemed so to me like winning
And then became the price I had to pay.

To thy own self be true

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2006-12-17 05:29 AM

oh my this is wonderful writing! enjoyed... RDB

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2006-12-17 10:56 AM

exactly!

good job!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

3 posted 2006-12-17 11:54 AM

"When loving you seemed so to me like winning
And then became the price I had to pay."

I find it sad that relationships should come to this but very well said!

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

4 posted 2006-12-18 08:34 AM

Thanks bunches Roniece.

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

5 posted 2006-12-18 08:34 AM

Thank you Dixie.

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

6 posted 2006-12-18 08:36 AM

Thanks Honeybunch, it certainly does suck, doesn't it?

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

7 posted 2006-12-18 12:37 PM

You did a great job here. Thank you for the read, You should read my poem rose in sun must fade they are both similiar. Kudos my friend!

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

8 posted 2006-12-19 03:28 PM

June Marie,
So very well said. Sometimes we need to start at the beginning, again.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

9 posted 2006-12-19 03:41 PM

Thank you trutodaraiders. I did attempt to read
"rose in sun must fade" but found it no where amongst your listed poems. Is that the actual title, or maybe it's something else?

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

10 posted 2006-12-19 03:50 PM

Larry, kindred spirit of my heart, I thank you.

You might wonder why I call you 'kindred spirit.' It's because in every word of all your writings, I see the essence of truth.

In my life, I value truth above all.

And so, I value your presence in my life, even if it's just through this website.

Merry Christmas, my friend, if I may call you that?

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2006-12-19 07:10 PM

Beautiful but sad! My wish for you is that you find the starting point, rekindle the original flame that brought the two of you together.

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

12 posted 2006-12-19 07:19 PM

Thank you Midnitesun, I appreciate your wish, but there never was a starting point at all. It was just something that I was misled by. The ending point is finished and done with, and neither one of us wants to rekindle it.

Happy Holidays.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.