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Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2006-12-14 01:17 PM

Sundown on Gray Stones

Tears burn like cheap whiskey,
spill down gullies
in his washed-leather cheeks.

The soft pink priest
murmurs marshmallow words
he can’t make out.

His ears are full of her whisper,
“I’ll never leave you.”

After fifty-three years
it hurts to know
she lied.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2006-12-14 01:47 PM

heartbreakingly beautiful....

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2006-12-14 02:39 PM

Pilgrimage
LOL no surprise.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2006-12-14 03:13 PM

gr8 write

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

4 posted 2006-12-14 04:00 PM

dang....sad stuff

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

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The Southwest

5 posted 2006-12-14 04:43 PM

magnificent work Nan

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

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OH

6 posted 2006-12-14 06:13 PM

Nan,

I knew when I saw your name, this would be perfection, and it is. I love how you paint mood, letter by letter, and so few of them. Such bitter after-taste life sometimes give. I feel the hurt evoked by your poem. Masterfully written.

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Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2006-12-14 11:11 PM

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

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Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

8 posted 2006-12-15 09:57 AM

.....sigh.....remembering my father-in-law, who died one day, but kept living for a decade. Thank you for bringing me such a soft and wistful memory for this foggy day.

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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

9 posted 2006-12-15 10:14 AM

Oh my, the loss of one's mate after 53 years!
Tenderly written, dear poet Nan.
Far beyond poignant, this reaches deeply into my heart. Peaceful wishes offered.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

10 posted 2006-12-15 05:42 PM

Thanks, guys. I truly appreciate your comments.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

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Sydney, Australia

11 posted 2006-12-17 04:42 AM

beautifully penned.. RDB

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