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The Exchange |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: The Exchange You knew from the very start My purse in pay would be my heart And spent it all within a day A smitten lover in a way You smiled at me a part flew out You winked at me another sprout And then you asked to take my arm And the purse went down in alarm You walked with me and talked with me And said you thought allot of me And the purse just fizzled flat And that was the end of that Then you asked me for a kiss My purse turned inside out for this I fell in love right then and there Never a doubt never a care And with the actions of a dove You filled my purse and life with love |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
awwww, this is soooo sweet Sir Sey. Lovely writing indeed...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Gentle, Thank you sweety.  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Dear Sy, You are adorable and I love this little love story. Love to you both, martyjo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
martyjo, Glad you enjoyed this poem. Thanks for the read and cute comment. |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
Very creative. Nicely done. Kudos |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
trutodaraiders Thank you and glad you enjoyed. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy...I think I have a purse like that...it's heavy but I carry it around all the time anyway.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Sounds good to me.   |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Sy...you are such a romantic!! I really enjoyed this!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
scorpio Thank you for the read and enjoyment. |
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Beatrice Boyle Member
since 2006-12-06
Posts 438 |
Cute and touching at the same time. It's nice to see a man not afraid of showing his emotions...Would that all men were poets! Bea Grandma Bea |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bea, Enjoyed your comment very much. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Sir Sy.... I like your words! a lovely description of love... RDB |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Roniece, I thank you for your time read and comment. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
sweet love story Sir Sy and that last line is a knockout |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady Glad you liked it, thank you. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sy, I love taking lessons from a sage. You just rock! "And the purse just fizzled flat And that was the end of that" And you crack me up! Here I thought you knew everything. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Larry C LOL you're as sharp as a tack. Thank you my friend. |
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