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LeeJ
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0 posted 2006-12-04 09:36 PM


standing before an echo
growing thick like cedar trees
mulling all spring long, into stretched
nights of parching summers
alone, alone
divulging rain, as it pummels down
without him telling
oh the fear to question
I always knew the answer
but played along, savoring each moment
we never talked of despair or saddness
did he realize
how he positioned a careless net?
my spirit, deep inside his chest
his stillness suggesting
distain for proceeding
dark eyes trained to disappear
in a gallery of five thousand souls
striking me as infinitely beautiful
now furious wind-swept flakes
tap against my window
whispering July portals
evaporating the smell of sour mildew
in its deepest nature
re-examining the souls attachment
honoring impulse
attraction...magnetism of souls
rests against my breast
for it is passion considering
the essence
of relationship
to places of ideas, and thought
true love is never lost
but compliments things of life
in sights
in sounds
those once intimate friends
moments were ephemeral
eternity made itself known
remains in imagination
for endless time
seemingly in tune
with each others
sensitivities
faithful
to the thoughts of love

...even though he left
before we broke up...

it was never about quantity
but quality in loyalty
to love

[This message has been edited by LeeJ (12-04-2006 10:56 PM).]

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1 posted 2006-12-04 09:42 PM


did he realize
how he positioned a careless net?

~*~

This caught the fish, er, reader;
the rest netted the truth.




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2 posted 2006-12-04 10:46 PM


Truly one day I hope my pen can stand besides yours.

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~



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3 posted 2006-12-04 11:57 PM


oh LeeJ!
how you reached in and grabbed my heart with this piece!
~a true work of art, a passionate write!

"standing before an echo
growing thick like cedar trees"

dang, but you had me with that opening, and then it just went on to flow with more passionate beauty

Honeybunch
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4 posted 2006-12-05 03:54 AM


LeeJ - You delve to the depths and always come up with remarkable writes and I don't know how to adequately praise such achievements.  If I say, "WOW" as so many others do, I hope you'll know the extent of my appreciation of your fine talent?  Here you go then - "WOW"!
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5 posted 2006-12-05 08:02 AM


I needed this

thank you

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6 posted 2006-12-05 08:09 AM


Lee~
You web such truth in your word-weaving of thoughts~

Outstanding ... poignant ... truths~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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7 posted 2006-12-05 08:18 AM


LeeJ
Well I hate to say it but you got that one right. Very explicit enjoyed.

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8 posted 2006-12-05 09:55 AM


Well, Lee, you have it ALL!  
Quantity, quality, my reading loyalty, and you obviously write with the knowledge of love  


Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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9 posted 2006-12-05 10:00 AM


ms leej, now I see a hand on your other shoulder too..enjoyed it babe
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10 posted 2006-12-05 10:14 AM


I am in awe once again.
hugs, Chris

Perhaps the best Yuletide decoration is being wreathed in smiles ~

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11 posted 2006-12-05 11:56 AM


Lee, please pat yourself on the back and kiss the mirror for me! I'd do it in person, but on this earthly plane there are some distance constraints!

What a marvellous, insightful write! You put the "P" in "Poetess"! Kudos for your muse, your ink, and YOU!

Loving, appreciative hug,
Linda xo


JL
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12 posted 2006-12-05 02:05 PM


EA above said it best!
Great write Lee J.

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

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13 posted 2006-12-05 04:28 PM


LeeJ, Marvelous!

  "Those once intimate friends' moments"...
   "remains in imagination for endless time"

This is the quality of that which was shared... perhaps to last a lifetime of warm recollection.... (sigh).. this, I know all too well.. (sigh).

secondhanddreampoet
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14 posted 2006-12-05 04:51 PM


Fine ‘write’ ! Tremendously powerful lines and images here...such as:

“did he realize
how he positioned a careless net?”

“dark eyes trained to disappear”

“now furious wind-swept flakes
tap against my window”

“to places of ideas, and thought
true love is never lost
but compliments things of life”

“passion considering
  the essence of relationship”

“it was never about quantity
but quality in loyalty
to love”

A lot of fine and important things to contemplate!

* a note of 'thanks' also to this fine author for comments
posted on my 'writes' and on a poetic 'duet' in which I participated.

JamesMichael
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15 posted 2006-12-05 07:40 PM


She left before we broke up...happened to me once...or was it twice...James
The Lady
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16 posted 2006-12-05 11:31 PM




"dark eyes trained to disappear
in a gallery of five thousand souls"

little gems exploding LeeJ
lighting the night

excellent


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17 posted 2006-12-06 02:52 AM


LeeJ, So many good lines and thoughts.But this sums it up.
   "it was never about quantity
    but quality in loyalty
       to love"
I love your mind and how you think things through... martyjo

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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18 posted 2006-12-06 03:19 AM


LeeJ ... loved your write! RDB
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