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DID I ? |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA 
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Did I speak those words that long would thrill, Or treat you as you should have been? Could I have loved you more or maybe still, Spoke of your beauty others had seen? Did I show my love in simple ways, Or tell you that my life was sweet? Did I tell you I loved the days, When in unison. our hearts would beat? Did I share the magic of our dance, When enveloped by your charms? Or the sweeping, lilting, soft romance, When I held you in my arms? Did I tell you of your caring grace, Or of the starlight in your eyes, Of the moonlight soft upon your face, Or the comfort in your sighs? You were always loved but never told, You were a perfect being to me, And I regret you lived. alone and cold, Without the knowledge of what love should be. Now, alas, my dreams are lost to sight And all those tender dances - gone, There'll be no stars nor moonlight bright, Just the final setting of the sun. Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
You were always loved but never told, You were a perfect being to me, And I regret you lived. alone and cold, Without the knowledge of what love should be. oh my!! we all have the right to be loved... and I loved this write of yours Bill  Be well Roniece |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bill~ A lovely write ... welcome to the pages blue~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
NIce writing...its never too late to let love, acceptance, forgiveness and caring live within your heart...James |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
..."And I regret you lived. alone and cold, Without the knowledge of what love should be. "... This line is the pinnacle. Your poem is beautiful. I would remove the "And"...a stronger statement, and remove the period after lived. "I regret you lived alone and cold, Without the knowledge of what love should be" Lovely flow to your words here. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is so very touching and beautiful. Nicely done. |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
Thank you diamond for the compliment and the insight to make this poem betterl much appreciated Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
Thank you gentle spirit; I wish someone would critique heart will tell no lies poem. Anyone? Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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