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trutodaraiders
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since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
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0 posted 2006-12-04 12:06 PM

How are friendships created;
What bonds their souls to each?
Is it sharing their deepest secrets
Or the love spoken in their speech?
How are friendships kept
Through the strain that they may face?
Is it saying, ”I love you”... sometimes,
Or occasionally touching base?

How are friendships lost
When there seemed no end in sight?
By ignoring their pain and anguish,
And not sharing in their delight.
So, I pledge to you, my friend,
I’ll never walk away;
I’ll share the good and bad,
And beside you... I’ll always stay.

And when life isn’t worth it,
When the tears roll down your cheek
Just close your eyes and listen
And from a distance... you’ll hear me speak.
Though my words at times seem pointless,
When no answers I seem to impart
Don’t listen the way you have in the past
But listen with your heart.

For the important things in life
Are invisible to your eyes;
You’ll hear them in your heart
For your heart will tell no lies.
So, though I may be far away,
Too far for you to reach,
Remember I’m there forever
For I’ve told you in my speech.

Yet, distance never mattered
For distance will only depend
On the depth of the love I have...
And I love you dearly, my friend.
So when clouds are at their darkest
And no lining do you see
You have a friend, so close,
And that friend - my friend - is me.

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2006-12-04 12:11 PM

Bill.... I think you know already I'm a fan of your beautifully written words!

This is delightfully warm and tender (still no sugar!)

Be well
Roniece

Did you make it safe to Oklahoma?

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

2 posted 2006-12-04 12:20 PM

Really? Your very sweet! Yes I had a safe trip. There is a lot of snow here, and ohh the delays. Remind me to say a prayer and thank God for my laptop! Thank You for reading my poem.

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~

MsSouthernOrchid
Member

since 2003-07-12

Posts 192

3 posted 2006-12-04 12:28 PM

Trutos,
Make that two fans! Another good write.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2006-12-04 12:28 PM

yes you express yourself very well in the written word and I enjoy reading your work...

Pleased you made it safe to "Oklahoma" (whenever I say that I feel the urge to sing!)

btw: the sun is still shining here

RDB

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2006-12-04 09:05 PM

..."And when life isn’t worth it,
When the tears roll down your cheek
Just close your eyes and listen
And from a distance... you’ll hear me speak.
Though my words at times seem pointless,
When no answers I seem to impart
Don’t listen the way you have in the past
But listen with your heart"...

Excellent theme...one very dear to my own heart.
This verse is the key...my observation...If you follow the meter of the previous two verses...you notice that they not only gel...but they are of the almost same length...

example:
When life just isn’t worth it,
As tears roll down your cheek
Just close your eyes and listen
From the distance hear me speak
Perhaps my words seem pointless
With no answers to impart
Don’t listen as you always have
But listen with your heart

I humbly offer a reader's perspective.
You may find as I have, that poetry doesn't require the typical grammer either. Sometimes I find that halts my flowing with the poem, as I try to fit into the designation. This has a very nice flow.
I really liked this very much.
TD

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2006-12-04 09:54 PM

this was sincerity with style, modest, yet, clearly spiritual...held my attention all the way through....definately a pleasure to read...not to mention...dreamy images and practicle wisdom.

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

7 posted 2006-12-04 10:40 PM

Thank you Diamond for your advice, and great it os. In high school and now even in my college "and,but have always cluttered my essays and poetries. This paticular poem shows that. LeeJ thank you so much for your comment. I came here not only to write, but to learn more. All comments are valued.

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