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miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

0 posted 2006-11-26 07:55 PM

“Why have you not been out” ‘twas asked,"to
  Enjoy Fall breeze and crisp dropped leaves?
How is it that inside you stay
   on such the perfect day?”

then he rolled the window down,
air crept to skin without a sound;
its hands from chin to cheeks

the silence as they drove
emphasized the naked road, and
outstretched arms rose side by side;
Creation embarked by Autumn ride

     “Do you see the bending woman,
      Can you fathom cradled child,
      Fingers that are calling,
      The wisp of human that is mild?”

“You’re mind is running wild!” he said,
“On such the perfect day,
you should get out more; take time
     with me to play!
This tree stuff is fictitious, and your
Personification is for the birds!”

She smiled the curl of northern cloud,
Continued dreaming along the way.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-11-26 08:24 PM

Zing those last two lines in...
they'll work every time!

I've missed you!

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

2 posted 2006-11-26 08:48 PM

and I, you! Yep, I think it's good to zing those last two lines, too! A SEE chord please... Ok... I'm just a little corny this evening!

Great to hear from you!

hugs,

cathy

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2006-11-26 08:58 PM

Outstanding!
Great read Miscellanea.
TD

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-11-26 10:37 PM

was just wondering where you've been

good to read you again

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2006-11-27 02:39 PM

I too am in love
with those last two lines!

love the whole thing

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2006-11-27 02:47 PM

ahhh, misce...it is good to read you! Loved this:

"She smiled the curl of northern cloud,"

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2006-11-29 02:38 PM

I love this very much, dear misce. Ahhhh, there is nothing like following the whispers of the spirit of freedom.
I could see your dreamy smile and felt the breeze ...
Just wonderful, some truly great lines!

Love,
Margherita

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

8 posted 2006-11-29 03:43 PM

Gr8 write

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

9 posted 2006-11-29 03:58 PM

This is one exceptional write misc !!!
Wonderful. hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
Carl Sandburg

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2006-12-01 01:09 PM

How is it that inside you stay
on such the perfect day?”

A question answered so well by the ending. *S* Beautiful work!!!

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