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‘Different’ paths |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! 
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“Reflectaphors in Time” (the ultimate solvent!) I walk...November streets stained with discontent and damp and dirty ‘promises’ dropped by ‘strangers’ with flint-chisel faces... ever passing...passing by bent on deadly purpose with the desert in their eyes. My heart’s bleached dry and bare, singed by crisp indifference beneath the angry skies as destiny points and laughs at just another ‘fool’... who will not surrender a lone and ‘different’ way lost in quiet memories and impotent dreams. |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
Wonderful write. The cool thing about "different" paths... They are ALL glorious and even the person who "thinks" they choose No Path...walks one. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Reflectaphors ...love the title and I see this myself in others and wonder if they see this in me. I enjoyed your view.. M |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Srong imagery simmers the reckoning of deep time, the travels of our life path including those missed steps. I see promise, not the intentioned pledge of another human necessarily, but the unconditional pledge of time itself. Extremely well written piece. TD |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I see a strength in understanding in this poem...and even from the deserts of life, we can learn hords. Bravo...well done |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
chiseled faces and dirty promises reminds me of a recruiter staring across the desk from you... [This message has been edited by Magnus (11-18-2006 10:41 AM).] |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Grand thanks to everyone for your comments pursuant to this 'write'!....the encouragement comes at a crucial time in that I have, very recently, received an 'assessment' of my poetry [from an editor of a prestigious poetry journal and a (double doctorate) poetry professor at a well-known university poetry center (considered one of the best)]...to the effect that it is essentially "pseudo-sentimental, syrup-laden, banal tripe!" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
secondhanddreampoet You know the old sticks and stones may break my bones but words will never hurt. There is merit in your syrup. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
The assessment is not uncommon from those who live, eat and breath poetry...and have studied it for decades... Unfortunately, a more kind way of approaching criticism is often not included in their mannerisms... Yes, sticks and stones... though it is often difficult to dodge them. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bruce...Me thinks that being different should be worn as a badge of honor, but indifference..now that hurts. Nice imagery...loved "with the desert in their eyes".  Good to see you posting despite the doc's assessment. |
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wredgranny Member
since 2006-11-18
Posts 493Ky. USA |
O'siyo Secondhanddreampoet,please remember those who say these things are sometimes those who only wish they could write such deep knowing,instead they are readers only you see? I like very much what you have to say here and see nothing syrupy at all,rather a deep look into ones own soul seeking a peace not often found! many blessings
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
personally, I love to read authors that are not afraid to color outside the lines...critics to, can be trendy...political....know it all's ya know? Keep in mind, Harry Potter was rejected 117 times. Keep writing and we'll keep reading, encouragement is what makes a writer strong and goes a long way. Hugs |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I would approach the criticism in this manner... It is a tool to help you grow and excel, become a better writer. It can be a great tool if the writer receives positive feedback from those that judge. Sadly...too often the time is not taken to give the writer a fair shake by giving him/her feedback or a reference source that will be helpful.... I guess the final question is....do you want to become better? Like Leej said...Harry Potter was rejected over 100 times before it was finally accepted.... Learn from the experience and never let them get you down. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Once again....thanks so very, very much...to all of you for the inspirational 'feedback'!! |
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