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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2006-11-11 10:50 AM


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Look at them
Yet do not touch them
With your regrets

There will be time
And space soon enough
Now is their hour
To know nothing of the past

See how they smile
And say it pleases you
Leave them in that glow

What after all
Is even breathing for
If not to be in love


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© Copyright 2006 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2006-11-11 01:18 PM


What a wonderful last two lines. What else is breathing for? Good job.
Kethry

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passing shadows
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2 posted 2006-11-11 09:40 PM


good thoughts
Juju
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3 posted 2006-11-13 12:22 PM


You are a good read John.

-Juju

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Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Paula Finn
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4 posted 2006-11-13 12:38 PM


What else is breathing for? Lovely just lovely, but the whole poem seems sad, like its you watching someone else be in love.
Huan Yi
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5 posted 2006-11-13 08:59 AM



Thanks all

John


PS

You're not bad yourself Juju

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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2006-11-13 10:37 AM


Right on!

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2006-11-13 03:15 PM


Huan Yi
Good thoughts, good write.

Juju
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8 posted 2006-11-13 04:34 PM


That is a very nice thing to say.  Thank you.

-Juju

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Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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9 posted 2006-11-14 05:57 AM


Yes, I can relate, I would not disturb them either enjoyed your write

Be well
Roniece

Drauntz
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10 posted 2007-04-25 01:24 PM


what a porfound life lesson by GreatX?-grandpa
Yi Haun.

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what a beautiful poem to tell a philosophy.

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