Open Poetry #39 |
Caution |
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Look at them Yet do not touch them With your regrets There will be time And space soon enough Now is their hour To know nothing of the past See how they smile And say it pleases you Leave them in that glow What after all Is even breathing for If not to be in love . |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
What a wonderful last two lines. What else is breathing for? Good job. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good thoughts |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
You are a good read John. -Juju -Juju |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
What else is breathing for? Lovely just lovely, but the whole poem seems sad, like its you watching someone else be in love. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thanks all John PS You're not bad yourself Juju |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Right on! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Huan Yi Good thoughts, good write. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
That is a very nice thing to say. Thank you. -Juju |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Yes, I can relate, I would not disturb them either enjoyed your write Be well Roniece |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
what a porfound life lesson by GreatX?-grandpa Yi Haun. ******** what a beautiful poem to tell a philosophy. |
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