Open Poetry #38 |
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Until the Bell Rings |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan ![]() |
Until the Bell Rings 06/09/06 Tick-Tock-Tick-Tock The clock ran down as brain cells died all in the name of Graham and Avogrado with their principles and laws benign that shook the brain until the heart died out 20-19-18-17-16 Tick-Tock-Tick-Tock The math weighed on and racked my soul knocking me down on the flat of my back and with this perspective I saw a new view the sight of a beast that was torn askew 15-14-13-12-11 Tick-Tock-Tick-Tock And my breath returned with its' tightened sigh relieving some of the nail biting butterflies that inhabited my spirit unbedded by a force only matched by Thoreau And his brothers in arms of the transcendental over soul 10-9-8-7-6 Tick-Tock-Tick-Tock The bombs exploded on the backdrop of the page with the genocide and terror spreading its' wrath and as a show of dominance ensued yet again a high pitched cackle and "Heil Hitler" erupted 5-4-3-2-1 And finally the bell had chimed its' last time as the pencils clattered down on the battle ground of June a cheer of joy echoed throughout the halls For finally the torture of exams had ended |
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SarBear Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 205Massachusetts |
This poem is so eloquently written...the imagery is amazing...I feel like I'm there which is a scary thought. Beautiful. |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Excellent !! Have a grade A summer !! ![]() hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
Thanks for the replies guys. I appreciate the feedback.Oh and have une bonne été plus! Tchao et as un bon nuit. (probably one of the last times I'm going too use the French language in a loonnnggg while ![]() ^_^ <333 Jill /\/The Editing Queen\/\ |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
What a surprise ending. Well done |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
I was trying to round up the more prominant things I learned in my just scrumptious Sophomore year and I figured heck why don't I write a poem about the three days that ever high schooler hates. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Very well done Shadow. You passed with flying colors. |
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