The Things That Time Can't Replace

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Open Poetry #38

The Things That Time Can't Replace

exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2006-06-07 07:04 PM

when did I become so afraid of touch
hand against skin
close contact between sheets
between clothes
between air
when did I lose sight of breath
and my lungs filling to capacity
till I could hold no more
and you exhaled for me
when did I forget how to blink
so rapidly
so as not to miss a moment
not to miss a gesture
so that every frame
is burned into my retina
when did I stop trying to tell time
and the hours between my words
the ever expanding distance
that brings loneliness
rather than freedom
when did my voice disappear
softer and softer
till there were no more sounds
just small gasps
waiting to be moved
waiting to be held

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

1 posted 2006-06-07 07:25 PM

How we foregt just how we came to be in certain instances..time moves so quickly..we become programmed so easily..manipulated willingly....the most important word in this fast paced world is autonomy/autonomous..how many of us are truly autonomous?..No shackles whatsoever?

Enjoyed this..another of your writes..always thought provoking..thank you..

Goldenrose.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2006-06-07 07:38 PM

Nice writing...James

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2006-06-07 08:14 PM

I've read this a plethora of times and it continues to blows me away - I think every one will relate to your powerful words.

This is another keeper

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

4 posted 2006-06-07 08:38 PM

I read it and it was great. Then I read it aloud and it was even greater. Line ending as punctuation is a great technique. It's the kind of poem that makes me want to hear the poet reading it. Thanks for sharing this.

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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2006-06-07 08:47 PM

Chelsea,

You turned the nozzle to full force with
this one....so many thoughts, feelings, and
so thought provoking of one self.

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