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Open Poetry #38

Prison

Neotec
Member

since 2006-08-22

Posts 112

0 posted 2006-08-29 11:11 PM

Walls of gray
Gray light all around
Bar's of gray
Food of poison
Starving in gray
Gray light holding on
Gray water pouring in
Floor of gray
Bed of gray dust
Crying gray tears
Prison of the heart
Dieing in the gray
Hopeing for color.

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2006-08-30 09:22 PM

Ah, now I see
why you reached
for color.

Well done, Poet.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2006-08-31 04:22 PM

This needs to be seen by others...

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Dublin Boy
Member

since 2006-08-26

Posts 102
UK

3 posted 2006-08-31 04:50 PM

Very well done, Neotec--I think the short, simple lines are extremely effective and powerful.
Cheers,
Bill

Neotec
Member

since 2006-08-22

Posts 112

4 posted 2006-08-31 09:39 PM

Thank you all : )

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