Open Poetry #38 |
by the bayou (charcoal man and his lady) |
The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
she loves to dance he loves to show her off sticks her on his finger takes her dancing they swoop slide shimmer dance he kneels lays her across his knee arms drape the floor helpless lady dressed out thin white pink stars shimmer charcoal man fresh shined feet pinch creased legs Panama ridin’ low jaunty walk lickety clickety co’cola can boy whispers promises I’m gonna get me a hat and a lady like that some day a good step and don’ care too he feeds her oysters sliding sweet salty fingers past lips teasing smiling she nips at his fingers rowdy as a pup charcoal man leaves her feet propped on banquette licking oyster salt steps out to fresh air a cigar purple and pink skirts soft laughter at bayou cloud scudding moon lady dips her toes shines smile at him winsome he lifts her swings her over dangerous waters gonna make you ‘gator meat she giggles puts her on his knee smoothes sharp water on night cooling skin looses pink stars hot air tips them hard kisses pouty bottom lip night blooming jasmine flaunts blowsy on way to sea if I fell in would you save me from the ‘gators what do you think darlin’ buries mouth in dark cool neck think you can’t swim |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I got to the last line, leaning in reading and just cracked up. Thank you for the gift. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
loveitloveitloveit |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you aziza made me laugh too she loves him but I think she knows he’s a devil thank you Helen |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
What a treat! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
they say ol gators are never hungry when the verve is spolin' proper enjoyed it lady one |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Jo! Stranger the verve is spolin' proper and I don’t get too close to old ‘gators dangerous... thank you |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lady Kate ~ I saw it! I smelled it! I tasted it! I heard it! I experienced it! ~ I LOVED it! My gawd, girl! You shore know how to engage your readers senses! ~ and that it the mark of a fine writer! Loving Light, Linda |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dang if you don't drag that bayou swaysoundscent clear north... Thank you, Lady! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Linda, I am so glad you enjoyed their story thank you for your kind words hugs thank you Karilea you inspire me you know? |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lady, this is BEAUTIFUL, so soft, so very lovely!! What beautiful flavors you drift our way! seek the flame within yourself |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you for your very kind words Gentle Spirit |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I laughed again ... and I was leaning in again. A |
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