Open Poetry #38 |
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Erasing the Rainbow |
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Martie
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Posts 28049California ![]() |
Erasing the Rainbow The morning light is dim a veil of mist and pewter sky where cool leaves crisp and perfect lay still in wait for wind of fate, wait some crunch from out the door that doesn’t hear what was before Changed changed Penetrate the mist of time and walk into the silent morning, hushed somehow where are the birds? A footfall’s like a spoken word. Looking for the sweet release of knowing this covered canopy only awaits the afternoon, I’ll open mind and sense of heart Now now Would the gate be closed to me between this minute and the next, how bide the glorious delay? Stay stay Wipe the friendly perfect glass, erase the rainbow that is fake for what is real. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Your writing is always a delight to read. ![]() |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
This is done to perfection. You've painted images that I can touch, a day I can feel. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Agree with the former, you painted a day to be touched. Wonderful to read you. TD |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You do have a wonderfully bristled brush that paints marvelously.... and I do like that 49ish picatoooor of yours...or was that 39ish? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Penetrate the mist of time and walk into the silent morning," ~ Your penning perfectly illustrates what I experienced on my morning's walk ![]() Yes, perfectly! Love & Nature's Light, Linda ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetMartieSis~ Ah ... such crisp thoughts of renewal~ Somehow ... (maybe because I have one) I did see that rainbow decal on the sliding glass doors~ ![]() Love you sweet lady~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, I know the sense the feel the time the real of all of this, Sissie... ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It is easy to apply the word perfection to your works... but today, I can't think of anything else. *S* This poem for this day was to me... perfection. *S* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm always in awe |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"...for what is real." ...that isn't lost in passing. Indeed, for what is real? |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Martie, Just beautiful. xoxoxo aziza |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
The morning light is dim a veil of mist and pewter sky where cool leaves crisp and perfect lay still in wait for wind of fate, wait some crunch from out the door that doesn’t hear what was before I felt every word this poem is a marvel you see things in 3 D! |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I could pick any verse and say I loved it ... 'cuz I do! You never fail to amaze, astound and entertain me with your wonderful work! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Martie, You just keep getting better and better! I think this is just excellent! Another on for the shelf! Have a great day! miscellanea |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Such a beautiful expression....but be careful dear lady....because when you wipe away what seems unreal, you may be brushing away the only thing that is. I've done that before, a time or two....but I never wrote it in such a magic way. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I felt the cool new leaves, and looked forward to the warm afternoon. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
those last few words say so much, as to what is fake and what is indeed real a poet who cares |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"A footfall’s like a spoken word your footfalls are eloquent Martie! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - more wonderful poetry from the very best - you are so special!!! |
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