Open Poetry #38 |
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Soliloquy |
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the quell Member
since 2006-07-19
Posts 144Liverpool, UK ![]() |
SOLILOQUY Spider-silk soliloquy~ Insipid sermon song, Pervading the thrum of those duskiest of dreams, Of my sweet, sadistic muse. - A tedious tale, poorly told Festooned with the faded red ribbons of my poverty - And when this little paper aeroplane, Founders in its pseudo sky, Of tangled verbal debris, And when defeat glistens, like an arctic sword unsheathed, The midnight tears are born, protruding, Creeping stealthily from hollow-socket eyes, (Lonely, still-born souls,cluttering the path to their own private Purgatory, So cold...) If these teardrops could speak, With ghost-tongues of their own, Like so many tiny minstrels, falling so softly from grace, I think, They'd say: "Shut up." They aren't flaps; they're my face! |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
ya know .. I was loving this all the way through, until the last line made me blink a little, and then giggle .. and then I loved it more ![]() ~*Sheli*~ By words the mind is winged |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
quell Reading this I looked upon Medusa. It froze me cold and still. Excellent write |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
quell The quick sand has caught your butterfly. Let me give you a bump. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Quell~ I liked the all of this penning~ THIS - 'Festooned with the faded red ribbons of my poverty -' - caught my fancy and would not let go~ Thanking Sir Seymour for bumping you~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
This I shall keep. Wonderfully penned. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
OUTSTANDING! |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nicely done, chuckled at the ending. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"And when defeat glistens, like an arctic sword unsheathed, The midnight tears are born, protruding, Creeping stealthily from hollow-socket eyes," ~My goodness, girl! You certainly can write with the best of 'em! Mmm, Mmm, Mmm ~ yer gooood! ![]() Loving Light, Linda ![]() |
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the quell Member
since 2006-07-19
Posts 144Liverpool, UK |
Thank you SO much everyone for the feedback. And special thanks to Seymour for the bump! |
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