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the quell
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0 posted 2006-08-12 05:01 PM


SOLILOQUY

Spider-silk soliloquy~
Insipid sermon song,
Pervading the thrum of those duskiest of dreams,
Of my sweet, sadistic muse.
- A tedious tale, poorly told
Festooned with the faded red ribbons of my poverty -
And when this little paper aeroplane,
Founders in its pseudo sky,
Of tangled verbal debris,
And when defeat glistens, like an arctic sword unsheathed,
The midnight tears are born, protruding,
Creeping stealthily from hollow-socket eyes,
(Lonely, still-born souls,cluttering the path to their own private Purgatory,
So cold...)
If these teardrops could speak,
With ghost-tongues of their own,
Like so many tiny minstrels, falling so softly from grace,
I think,
They'd say:
"Shut up."

They aren't flaps; they're my face!
                               - The Mighty Boosh

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divine chaos
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1 posted 2006-08-12 05:34 PM


ya know .. I was loving this all the way through, until the last line made me blink a little, and then giggle .. and then I loved it more

~*Sheli*~

By words the mind is winged
~Aristophanes~

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2006-08-12 07:31 PM


quell
Reading this I looked upon Medusa. It froze me cold and still. Excellent write

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2006-08-13 12:51 PM


quell
The quick sand has caught your butterfly.
Let me give you a bump.

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2006-08-13 01:00 PM


Quell~

I liked the all of this penning~

THIS -

'Festooned with the faded red ribbons of my poverty -'

- caught my fancy and would not let go~

Thanking Sir Seymour for bumping you~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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seraphin
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5 posted 2006-08-13 01:07 PM


This I shall keep. Wonderfully penned.
ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2006-08-13 01:09 PM


OUTSTANDING!
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7 posted 2006-08-13 01:23 PM


Nicely done,  chuckled at the ending.
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8 posted 2006-08-13 02:10 PM


"And when defeat glistens, like an arctic sword unsheathed,
The midnight tears are born, protruding,
Creeping stealthily from hollow-socket eyes,"

~My goodness, girl! You certainly can write with the best of 'em! Mmm, Mmm, Mmm ~ yer gooood!

Loving Light,
Linda

the quell
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9 posted 2006-08-13 06:29 PM


Thank you SO much everyone for the feedback. And special thanks to Seymour for the bump!
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